中考初中英语被动语态讲解(精心整理) (8)

中考初中英语被动语态讲解（精心整理）

被动语态专题

定义


语态是动词的一种形式，表示主语和谓语之间的关系。
< br>英语有两种语态：主动语态和被动语态。主动语态表示主语是谓语的执行者。被动语态表
示主语是 谓语动作的承受者。


被动语态的构成：助动词be+及物动词的过去分词


被动语态的时态：


“主动语态变被动语态，时态不变动”，即助动词be 的时态要跟原主动语态中的时态保持一
致。请看下表：


时态

一般现在时

一般过去时

一般将来时

现在进行时

现在完成时

含情态动词

被动结构

amisare+过去分词

waswere+过去分词

willshall be+过去分词

amisare being+过去分词

havehas been+过去分词

canmaymust... be+过去分词


主动语态变被动语态的方法


第一步：先确定主动句的主、谓、宾，找出其中的谓语动词。

第二步：把主动句中的宾语变为被动句的主语，若宾语是人称代词，变宾格为主格。

第三步：把主动句中的谓语动词变为“助动词be +及物动词的过去分词”， 时态不变。

第四步：把主动句中的主语变为被动句中介词by的宾语(没必要说出动作的执行者时，
“by +宾语”在句中常省略。)，若主语是人称代词，应把主格变为宾格。


请对比下面的主动句和被动句：

主动语态：They(主语) grow(谓语) tea(宾语) in the southeast of China.

被动语态：Tea(主语) is grown(谓语) by them in the southeast of China.


随堂演练（把下列句型改为被动句）

writes a letter every week.

→

Lei mended the broken bike this morning.

→

grow trees every spring.

→

mother cleans our room every morning.

→


补充：

①S + V +IO +DO双宾语的结构 变为被动语态时，可把其中一个宾语变为被动语态的主
语。若将直接宾语变为主语，需根据习惯在原间宾 语前加上介词to或for 。

用to的常见词有：give, show, send, lend, pass, pay, teach, throw, bring …….

用for的常见词有：design, choose, sing, buy, get, cook ……

1. Mary gave him some books.

He was given some books by Mary.

Some books were given to him by Mary.

2. Her father bought her a new bike.

She was bought a new bike by her father.

A new bike was bought for her by her father.






随堂演练：

（1）He gave me a book.

→___________________________________ _(间接宾语作主语)

→____________________________________ (直接宾语作主语)

（2）My father bought me a new bike.

→___________________________________ _(间接宾语作主语)

→____________________________________ (直接宾语作主语)


②S+ V+ O+ OC带复合宾语（宾语+宾语补足语） 的结构变为被动语态时，只能将宾语变
为被动语态的主语，宾语补足语不可变为主语。

call him Gina.

→ He is called Gina (by us).

made me happy.

→I was made happy (by them).

asked me to come here.

→I was asked to come here (by him)


补充：

在主动语 态中，使役动词和感官动词后接动词原形（即省to的动词不定式），在变成被动
语态时，需将to补上 。使役动词let除外。


使役动词和感官动词有：一感（feel）, 二听（hear，listen to）,三让（make, have, let）,四看
（look at, see, watch, notice）

I saw him play football on the playground just now.

→He was seen to play football on the playground by me.


随堂演练：

1. We saw them _______(play) football.

They _______ _______ ______ _______ football.

2. We often hear her _______(sing) in English.

She_____ often _____ _____ ____ in English.


另：see, hear 后接doing作宾补时, 在变为被动语态时不加to。

I can hear him singing.

He ________ _______ ______ _______.





被动语态的否定句和一般疑问句


被动语态的否定句构成须在第一个助动词后加not。
被动
语态
的否
定句
和疑
问句

否定
My homework has not been finished.
我的作业还没有完成。
一般疑
问句
被动语态的一般疑问句是将第一个助动词置于主语
之前。
Will the worker be sent away? 这个工人将被解聘
吗？

The photos were taken in Japan.

① (改为否定句)



②（改为一般疑问句，并做肯定和否定回答）



被动语态的用法

(1)不知道或没有必要说明动作的执行者是谁。

My bike was stolen yesterday.

(2)强调动作的执行者时，使用“by+执行者”。

The pen was used by my father.

【注意】只有及物动词才有被动语态。不及物动词 如rise，come，go，happen，take place
等，没有被动语态。


被动语态注意点

含“不及物动词+ 介词副词”（短语动词）的句子变成被动语态时，介词或副词不能
丢掉。

She took good care of her grandmother.

→Her grandmother was taken good care of by her.


随堂演练

often talk about that film.

That film is often talked ______.

looks after me very well.

I ________________________________.

3. The nurse took good care of the sick man.

The sick man __________________.


4. We should speak to the old people politely.

The old people should _______________politely.


主动形式表示被动意义. (强调动作自然发生，或事物本身性质)


a)某些连系动词: look, smell, taste, feel, sound。主动形式表示被动意义。

The music ________(听起来) interesting.


b)说明主语特征、状态的词。这类词通常主动表被动。

grow well , ,wash well , write well , sell well，read well, break easily ,hurt badly（疼得厉害）


随堂演练

1. We grow rice every year. And it grows well.

2. The glass was broken by a boy. This kind of glass ______ easily.(容易碎)

3. The pen is sold here. It well . (写起来好)

4. That book is sold here. It _______________well. (卖得好) (读起来好)

5. The shirt is washed every day. And it _______well. (洗起来好)

6. I like eating the food. And it ______ well (吃起来好)

7. He _______by a car yesterday. Now, his head _________(疼)badly.


c)当open, close, shut, lock, move等用作不及物动词且表示主语的某种属性时，通常主

动表被动。


d)need, want, require等动词以及形容词worth（值得）后面， 跟-ing的主动形式表达被
动意义。

need doing sth = need to be done

want doing sth = want to be done

require doing sth = require to be done

My old bike needs repairing =My old bike needs to be required。

我的旧自行车需要修一下。

be worth doing sth 值得被做某事

随堂演练

My clothes need ___________ (wash).

The book is worth ___________ (read) twice.

The house needs __________(repair).


表示动作自然发生的动词，如：appear, come out, happen, take place, die, disappear,
fall, break down, itch, rise, belong to


随堂演练

1. In summer, leaves ________(落下) .

2. His car ________(抛锚了)on the way here.

3. An accident _____(发生) and he _____(死了).

4. Great changes __________(发生) over the years.

5. A big cloud ________(出现) when the sun _______(消失).

6. Our teacher told us the sun ________(升起) in the east.



二、英语书面表达专项训练
2
．临近毕业，学校在学习小组内开展了初中阶段自评和组评活动，假设你是
Moonlight
小
组

的组长，请根据下面表格中的信息和提示，为你的组员
Tommy
进行综合素质的评价，
写一

份素质报告．

Name

Characteristics

Hobbies

Honour

Tommy

聪明、大方（各举一例）

喜欢看书，认为看书有很多好处（请列举
2
个好处）

他在家帮助做家务。在学校和同学相处融洽。上学途中遵守交通规则
（举

一例）。今年，学校授予了他优秀学生奖（
Award for Best Student
）

Problems

Your
suggestions

面临考试，遭受压力痛苦，他没有充足的睡眠．

（根据实际情况提
2
点建议）
…


要求：< br>1
、表达清楚、语法正确、上下文连贯；
2
、要点必须包括所有相关信息，并作 适当
发挥；
3
、词数：
100
词左右；
4
、不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等

Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight.

【答案】
Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight. He is clever and he is good at all his
lessons. He is so generous that he shares everything with his likes reading because he
thinks he can get much knowledge and learn more about the world by reading. And reading has a
good effect on children’s growth. At home, he can help his parents do some housework. At school,
he gets on well with his classmates. On the way to school, he obeys the traffic rules. He crosses
the road when the light is green. Our school presented him with Award for Best Student this year.
However, Tommy is stressed when the exam comes. And he doesn’t have enough sleep.

I think he should go over what he has learned before exams. It’s better for him to manage his
time wisely so that he can have enough time to rest.

【解析】

这篇作文要求我们按照表格里的内容介绍一下
Tommy
的情况，为
Tommy
写一篇综合素质
的评价报告。在表格中有 非常详细的关于
Tommy
各方面的内容，我们需要用正确的英语把
这些内容有条理的 表达出来。表格中涉及的内容较多，写作时要注意表达的条理性。这篇
作文应主要使用第三人称来写。在 最后要给
Tommy
提一些建议，这一部分应该用第一人
称。同时注意表达的准确性， 尤其是表格中的第五项和第六项内容。

【亮点说明】这是一篇比较优秀的范文。这篇作文内容 完整，包含了表格中的所有内容，
没有遗漏要点。表达准确，注意了被动形式的使用，如
He was rewarded by our school this
year.
。写作时注 意了条理性，使文章具有层次感，条理清楚。短文注意到了长短句的结
合，并恰当的使用了一些连词，使 文章表达的连贯。如
He is always ready to help others.
、
He not only likes reading detective novels but also likes watching programs about sports news.
、
He is good at running. He won the first place in our school sports meeting this year.
等。



3
．旅 行是学习的最好方式之一。请以
“Travelling”
为题，根据以下思维导图的提示，写 一篇
短文，并发表你的看法。

注意：

1.
要点齐全，适当发挥；


2.
从思维导图
Sayings
部分，选择恰当的格合理利用在短文中；


3.
词数：
100
词左右；

【答案】例文


Travelling is one of the best ways for learning. You may have read or heard about something, but
you can never get an exact picture of it until you see it yourself. Seeing is believing. If you are a
careful observer, you can learn much during your travel about the geography, biology, and history
of the places you visit. You can also create great memories for your lifetime. Furthermore, while
travelling, you can meet more people and make more friends. No matter how well educated you
are, there is always a lot for you to learn through travelling.

【解析】

【详解】

这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如
one of the best ways
，
learn
much
，
an exact picture of
，
a careful observer
，
seeing is believing
，
no matter
，
a lot
等。而非
谓语动词结构
Seeing is believing. Furthermore, while travelling, you can meet more people and
make more friends.
和
If you are a careful observer, you can learn much during your travel about
the geography, biology, and history of the places you visit. No matter how well educated you are,
there is always a lot for you to learn through travelling.
等复杂从句结构的运用，丰富了短文内
容，使表达多 样化，是本文的亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时
就可以适当引用，使文章表达 更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。

【点睛】

书面表达题既不是 汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理
后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知 识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要
尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使 用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得
到较高的分数。


4
．
“inspire”
一词的汉语解释是
“
激励；鼓 舞；赋予灵感；或启发思考
”
等。请以
“The
person who inspired me”
为题写一篇不少于
80
词的短文，向校报的英语园地投稿。

要点：
1. What kind of person is he she
？

2. How did he she inspire you
？

要求：
1.
文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名。

2.
语言流畅，字迹清楚。

【答案】
The person who inspired me

Many people around gave me deep impressions. They helped me, encouraged me and inspired
me. But the person who inspired me most, I think, is my friend Wang Peng.

Wang Peng is a small thin boy with two big black eyes. He doesn't talk too much, but always
keeps a smile on his face. He is warm-hearted and ready to help others. If I need any help for my
math exercises, he is always the one that can help me out. As a good student, he studies very
hard. In the early morning, you can see him stand near a tree and read English intensively. Few
students can arrive at school as early as he is. He also does well in many sports, such as
badminton and ping-pang. He got the first prize in last year's ping-pang competition.

You can see the good personality and the spirit of persistence in this small body. He is my idol and
I wish I could be a student as good as he is.

【解析】

【详解】

这篇作文要求我们以
The person who inspired me
为题，介绍一个曾经激励过你的人。题目
中用 问题的形式给予了提示，审题可知，短文应包括两个部分的内容：首先介绍这个激励
过你的人是谁，他是 怎样的一个人；然后介绍他是如何激励你的。学生们可以这两个问题
为提纲，发挥想象力，充实细节信息 ，组织语言，连贯成文。短文应以一般现在时和一般
过去时为主来叙述，人称是第三人称和第一人称，注 意谓语动词形式的变化。写作时应注
意：首先要符合题目要求，包括题目中要求的所有信息，不能遗漏要 点，可以适当发挥，
注意上下文的衔接。其次应注意英语表达习惯和汉语的不同，不要按照汉语思维逐词 翻
译。应该从句子的整体结构入手，写完整的句子。可以简单句结构为主，辅以并列句、复
合句 。为提升文章档次，应使用高级词汇以及复杂结构。同时语句之间使用恰当的连接成
分使文意连贯、自然 。

【点睛】

这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求，介绍了一个曾 经激励过自己的人。短文有
以下几个优点：首先文章内容完整，层次清晰，短文分三段，第一段先介绍了 这个人是
谁，第二段描写了这个人身上的品质以及对自己的应选；最后一段结尾。各部分内容安排
合理，主次分明。其次短文中使用了正确的人称和时态，文章以第三人称和第一人称为主

来叙述，主要使用了一般现在时和一般过去时，动词形式变化准确，注意了第三人称单数
形式以及过去 式形式的变化，语法规范。用词准确，语言得体，句式结构完整，符合英语
的表达习惯。短文中使用了一 些较好的句型和短语，如
But the person who inspired me most,
I think, is my friend Wang Peng.
、
Wang Peng is a small thin boy with two big black eyes.
、
He
doesn't talk too much, but always keeps a smile on his face.
、
If I need any help for my math
exercises, he is always the one that can help me out.
、
He also does well in many sports, such as
badminton and ping-pang.
、
He is my idol and I wish I could be a student as good as he is.
等等。


5
．假如你是王梅，有一个弟弟
< br>妹妹一直是你的梦想，去年你家里添了一个弟弟

妹妺，你
非常开心，请根据内容 要点，写一封电子邮件给你的笔友李蕾，和她分享你的快乐，告诉
她你的变化。（
brother
，
sister
任选其一）

内容要点
:
（
1
）我一直想有个弟弟、妹妹；

（
2
）去年我的梦想实现了，有了弟弟

妺妹；

（
3
）他

她非常可爱，给我们带来了欢乐，伴我成长，不再孤单；

（
4
）我学会了分享和照顾家人；

（
5
）请补充几点弟弟、妹妹到来后你的变化。

参考词汇：
joy
；
grow up with sb.
伴某人成长
;on one’s initiative
主动地；
help do the
housework
；
study hard
；
set an example
树立榜样。

写作要求：（
1
）不得使用真实姓名和校名

（
2
）包含以上所有要点，可适当增加细节，使内容充实，行文连贯；

（
3
）字迹工整，语言精练，表达准确，条理清楚；

（
4
）词数
80
左右。（书信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。）

Dear Li Lei,

I have been dreaming to have a brothersister. Last
year,______________ __________________________________________________ ___________
___________________________________ ____________________________________________
__ __________________________________________________ ___________________________
___________________ __________________________________________________ __________
____________________________________ ___________________________________________
___ __________________________________________________ __________________________
____________________ __________________________________________________ _________
_____________________________________ __________________________________________
____ __________________________________________________ _________________________
_____________________ __________________________________________________ ________
______________________________________ __________________________________

I’m lucky and happy to have a brother sister. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours,

Wang Mei

【答案】
Dear Li Le,

I have been dreaming to have a sister. Last year, my dream came true. I was really happy to have

such a lovely baby sister.

She brings lots of joy to our family and she grows up with me day by day. Every time I see the big
smile on her face, my heart is full of sweet feelings. I will come over to see her and play with her
as soon as I get home every day. Now I’m not alone any more.

Above all, I have learned to share and look after others since she was born. I learn to help my
mother do the housework, such as washing clothes, cooking and looking after my little sister on
my own initiative. In order to set a good example for my little sister, I decide to study hard all the
time and go to a famous university one day. Taking care of the baby is a hard job and I learn to be
patient from it. I also learn to be kind and friendly to her.

I’m lucky and happy to have a sister. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours

Wang Mei

【解析】

【分析】

这篇书面表达顺应了当今的热门话题，
“
二胎
”
，主要是站在孩子（考生）的角度，分享有
了弟弟或妹妹后的喜悦。

【详解】

这是篇材料作文内容要点给的比较详细，考生主要把所有要点表达清楚连贯 就是篇不错的
短文；参考词汇中，给了一些很好的词汇，考生一定要把它们融合到作文里。在写作时，< br>首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，这样才
可以更好 的驾驭。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体。


6
．书面表达


我校决定让学生轮流打扫厕所，以此作为教育学生的一种方式。

这件事在学生中引

起了强
烈的反响，请你把下列不同意见整理成一篇书面材料，报告给学校。


同意

：
1
．多数学生是独生子女，不会做事。


2
．学生应该学会做艰苦的工作。


3
．学会理解和尊重清洁工人的劳动。


不同意：
1
．很脏，容易使学生生病。
2
．不是学生应该做的事情。
3
．打扫教室就足够
了。


注意：
1
．短文应包括表中所有内容，可适当发挥，但不要逐字翻译；
2
．不少于
80
词。

生词提示：
respect
尊重

【答案】
A strong argument has taken place among students since our school made students do
voluntary labor.

Some students think it is a good way of education. Now most families have only one child. They
never do hard work. To do voluntary labor is a good chance for them to learn how to do difficult
work. It can also help them understand and respect the cleaners.

But others have different points. They think it is easy for them to get sick. They don’t think it is
students
＇
jobs. Cleaning the classroom every day is enough.

【解析】

【详解】

阅读题干要求，这是一篇看法类的作文，那么首先得点明讨 论的话题，然后分别写出不同
人群对此事的看法，时态以一般现在时为主。

重点词汇及短语：
argument
争论；
take place
发生；
among
（三者或三者以上）之间；
a
good chance for sb
对某人来说是个好机会；
help sb do sth
帮助某人做某事；
get sick
生病。

亮点句型：

（
1
）
A strong argument has taken place among students since our school made students do
voluntary labor.
自从我们学校让学 生做自愿劳动以来，在学生中发生了一场激烈的争论。
现在完成时（
havehas+done
）。

（
2
）
To do voluntary labor is a good chance for them to learn how to do difficult work.
做义务
劳动是他们学习如何做困难工作的好机会。动词不定 式作主语，谓语动词用单数，疑问词
+to do
。


7
．书面表达

我们在生活中总是面对着各种各样的压力，这会严重妨碍我们 的学习和生活。某中学生英
文报正开辟专栏讨论中学生如何减压。假设你叫李华，请从以下几个方面，用 英语写出你
的具体做法，向该栏目投稿。

1.
与他人交流；

2.
参加体育运动；

3.
参加娱乐活动；

4.
其它减压方式。

参考词汇：
stressed adj.
有压力的

注意：

1.
词数
80-120
左右；

2.
文中不得出现真实人名及学校名；

3.
开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear editor,

There are many ways for us high school students to relax ourselves.



Yours,

Li Hua

【答案】
Dear editor,

There are many ways for us high school students to relax for I feel
stressed,I usually communicate with my friends,parents or mes I will do sports
with my classmates,such as riding bikes,going swimming and so on.I go to the movies or listen to
light music in my spare time,'s more, going on a trip in holiday is another way to make
me relaxed. I believe the more relaxed we are, the happier we will be healthy and learn
better .

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

【详解】

这是一篇要求介绍自己面对着 各种各样的压力是如何做的。动笔前先要认真阅读要点，围
绕要点组织材料，然后用正确的英语句子把这 些内容表达出来，在此基础上亦可适当发
挥，注意不要遗漏材料中给出的要点。根据材料可知本文主要是 应用第一人称，一般现在
时态，注意标点符号及大小写等问题，不要犯语法错误。注意上下文之间的逻辑 关系，语
意连贯。


8
．书面表达

中考后暑假 即将开始，你和一些同学准备结伴出国旅行。旅行社提供了两个国家供你选择
游玩。请根据旅行社提供的 信息，将你的选择用英文向同学们介绍。

Britain

Time

July 1 - July 14

visit the Buckingham Palace (
白
金汉宫
)

Activities

visit the British Museum (
大

英博物馆
)

watch football matches

…

Attention

Cost

changeable weather

20,000 yuan


Australia


Time






Attention


Cost

Activities

August 15 -August 24

visit the Sydney Opera House

travel around the Gold Coast (
黄
金海岸
)

have fun with kangaroos and
koalas

…

winter

16,000 yuan


要求：

1.
所写内容必须包括某一国家的所有信息及选择的理由；


2.
结 合游玩国家的情况，自拟希望可以安排的活动，并提出
1-2
点出游的注意事项；

3.
文章不少于
90
词，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；

4.
语义通顺、意思连贯、条理清楚、书写规范；

5.
不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。

The summer holiday is coming. I think it’s a good idea to travel abroad.











I hope I will have a good time there!

【答案】
The summer holiday is coming. I think it’s a good idea to travel abroad. I have read

information about two countries——Britain and Australia. I like britain. So I think we can go to
time is july 1 to july 14. Its activities include visiting the buckingham palace,visiting the
british museum, and watching football first, I want us to visit the Buckingham Palace
and the british museum, I think it is very helpful for us to understand the history and culture of
Britain. Next I hope to watch football matches. I like football very much. It will be exciting.

However, the weather in Britain is changeable, which will make our trip inconvenient. And it's
expensive to travel to the UK, which costs 20000 yuan, But I still want to travel to England.

I hope I will have a good time there!

【解析】

【详解】

这是一篇给材料作文。中考后暑假即将开始，你和一些同学准备结伴出国旅 行。旅行社提
供了两个国家供你选择游玩。要求根据旅行社提供的信息将你的选择用英文向同学们介绍。首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个
要点中可能 要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作。在写作时，注意连句成篇，保持文
章的连贯性，要层次清楚， 要点分明，中心突出。同时要注意语言的表述应该符合语法的
结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯；尽量 使用自己熟悉的单词句式，最好不要写太长的
复合句；尽量选取简单的易拼写的单词，确保正确率；词汇 、句式要丰富多样，可以为文
章增色添彩。最后要细心复核检查，确保正确无误。


9
．书面表达。

因学习压力大，部分中学生的身体健康状况有所下降，这一 情况已经引起社会的关注和教
育部门的高度重视。假若你是来自九年级三班的李华，请根据以下内容，用 英语写一份不
少于
80
词的倡议书。建议大家积极多参加体育活动，提高身体素质。不 得出现真实姓名。

要点：
1.
锻炼身体的好处：
strong
，
healthy...

2.
锻炼身体的方式：
play ball games
，
running
，
swimming...

3.
请你谈谈对学校开展体育锻炼的看法和建议。

要求：
1.
内容必须包括以上要点，可适当发挥；

2.
开头已给出，不计入总词数；

3.
语句通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；

4.
文中不得出现真实姓名及校名。

Dear schoolmates,

I am Li Hua from Class Three, Grade Nine. Health is very important to us teenagers.
____________________

_________________ __________________________________________________ ____________
__________________________________ _____________________________________________
_ __________________________________________________ ____________________________
__________________ __________________________________________________ ___________
___________________________________ ____________________________________________
__ __________________________________________________ ___________________________
___________________ __________________________________________________ _________

Li Hua

【答案】
Dear shoolmates,

I am Li Hua from Class Three,Grade Nine. Health is very important to us teenagers. Either study or
work is based on a strong body. Doing sports every day helps us keep healthy. If we don’t take any
exercise, we may feel tired and get sick easily. Just as we often say, “Exercise one hour a day
keeps illness away. ”

There are many kinds of sports we can do, such as running, swimming and playing ball games.

But we have to do too much homework after school, I hope teachers will give us less homework
so that we can have more time to take part in sports. I also hope our school can organize more
sports activities for us.

In order to build ourselves stronger and stronger,let’s take active part in all kinds of sports in
proper time.

Li Hua

【解析】

【详解】

本文属于话题作文。讲述锻炼身体的好处、锻炼的方式，并建议大家积极参加体育活动。
根据要表达的内 容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

亮点说明：这是一篇 优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习
惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使 用一些亮点词句，如
either...or..., be based on, keep
healthy, such as, have time to do, take part in, in order to, stronger and stronger
以及
all kinds of
等，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

【点睛】

写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：

认真审题。审好题是 写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符
合要求。

构思提 纲。有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。通常书面表达给
出的话题是开放的，而 具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中
心突出、明确的关键。
初写短文。一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确
性、连贯性 以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意
使用恰当的连词，使句子衔 接自然。

修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外 ，还
要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词
数 是否符合要求等。