适合做背景音乐的歌gre满分作文汇总

2020年12月15日发(作者：吕玉坤)
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gre满分作文汇总

Both the development of technological tools and the uses to
which humanity has put them have created modern
civilizations in which loneliness is ever increasing.
The technological tools we as a society have developed are
not in themselves positive or negative, they are just that, tools.
The uses, however, are definitely a different story. Computers, I
believe at one time, were developed to save us time. Do our
work more quickly for us so that we could have more leisure
time to spend doing those things we enjoy. We have found
now, especially those of us that are parents, that all of the
leisure time we have gained is either spent watching our
children learn things on the computer or creating our own
unique something on the family computer. For one thing, it
has become a very fun item, the computers have become
more than just work related technological tools. The amount
of human interaction is limited, because people in general are
spending much of their leisure time doing solo on the
computer. In the past, it was common for the new young
exectutive to get a membership to the exercise club as a perk,
where he could socialize with the upper crust. Now the new

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young exec. gets a car phone or a portable fax, so that he can
work from whereever he is, usually doing that solo trip to
somewhere. Given these as examples, I would tend to agree
with the statement that lonliness has increased as a direct
result.
Comments:
This response is limited in its analysis of the issue.
The writer clearly expresses the idea that the technological
tools we as a society have developed are not in themselves
positive or negative. However, the response provides only
limited support for the position. The two examples are loosely
connected and undeveloped; for example, the relevance of the
young executive example is not clear because there is no
transition from the preceding example of the computer. The
conclusion, one sentence long, simply restates the claim made
in the topic.
The awkward sentences are evidence of a limited fluency.
Greater use of compound sentences could help eliminate
structural problems and facilitate the communication of ideas
(e.g., sentences 3 and 4 could be combined).
For all of these reasons, this is not an adequate response. It
received a score of 3.

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gre满分作文2
Both the development of technological tools and the uses to
which humanity has put them have created modern
civilizations in which loneliness is ever increasing.
Computers of all shapes and sizes, p.c.s, laptops, faxes, phones,
the list never ends. All considered by our society as great
technological advances. Not many would argue that the
development of these tools has not advanced our world in
some ways. However they certainly seem to be making our
world one in which contact with our fellow man is less and less
necessary. Though some may be more comfortable not having
to engage in direct contact, it is questionable whether this is
beneficial to society as a whole. The very least result could in
fact be a very lonely world, but it may result in more significant
problems.
Comments:
This response is seriously flawed. The analysis of the issue is
extremely limited, and there are serious problems in sentence
structure. The writers position, never clearly stated, seems to
be that as a result of technological developments, contact with
our fellow man is less and less necessary. However, the
implications of this statement (and others) are never explored

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or developed. Furthermore, the list of technological
advancements does not support or clarify the writers already
tenuously held position. Each new sentence could serve as a
springboard to a thoughtful analysis but instead takes the
response further from the apparent premise.
This response received a score of 2, not because of language
problems, but because reasoning, analysis, and development
are extremely thin and insubstantial.
gre满分作文3
Both the development of technological tools and the uses to
which humanity has put them have created modern
civilizations in which loneliness is ever increasing.
This statement is stating. The more advance in tecnology that
society becomes, the more we depend on technology to live
our everyday lives. Society as a whole will out do daily tasks
and depend more on machines and computers to accomplish
those tasks for them. For example; I was told that the younger
generations use caclators in classes on a everday level. We
counldnt do that. We had to resolve a problem on our own.
Because caculators are being used, math problems are being
adjusted around the caculators. If I didnt know how to use a
caculator today then I most likely woulndt know how to

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attempt to tackle the math of today. Computers of today are
another example. Writing a essay took a lot of thought and
hard work in past. Today, I can type some words in the
computer and that computer will spell, make grammer
correction, and dictate a right form to use in my essay. In the
past we had to all these things on our own. Im not putting
down modern technology totally. I just want to state that if we
take away peoples ability to think then we will slowly loose our
ability to function with out modern technology.
Comments:
This response is fundamentally deficient because it does not
discuss the issue. Instead, it briefly discusses the drawbacks of
specific types of technology (e.g., calculators and computers)
in terms of the effect they have on an individuals ability to
function without them.
Furthermore, the awkward and imprecise phrasing often
interferes with meaning (e.g., Society as a whole will out do
daily tasks???).
gre满分作文4
Our declining environment may bring the people of the world
together as no politician, philosopher, or war ever could.
Environmental problems are global in scope and respect no

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nations boundaries. Therefore, people are faced with the
choice of unity and cooperation on the one hand or disunity
and a common tragedy on the other.
Cooperation---or Tragedy?
The solution to the worlds growing environmental problems
may have to wait awhile. It has been said that environmental
problems are global and respect no nations boundaries.
Unfortunately, pollution and its consequences still fall to large
measure on those least likely to do anything about it: poor
countries willing to sacrifice anything in order to sit at the
table with the worlds wealthy.
As far as the industrialized nations of the world are concerned,
the world is a big place. Environmental destruction taking
place outside their borders may sometimes be fodder for
government pronouncements of concern, but few concrete
actions. Deforestation of the Amazon, for instance, is of vital
concern to all those who wish to continue breathing. But the
only effective deterrent to this activity, the restriction of
international aid money to those countries showing net
deforestation, has been stalled in the United Nations by those
unwilling to interfere in the internal politics of other nations.
Because of the differential impact of polluting activities

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around the world, and even in different regions of a single
country, many governments will undoubtedly continue to
promulgate only modest environmental regulations. Costs to
polluting companies will continue to carry as much weight as
the benefit of a pollution-free environment. Particularly in the
current political climate of the United States, the
well-documented expense of todays pollution-control
measures will be stacked against the unknown long-term
effects of polluting actitivities. Why should I spend millions of
dollars a year, which causes me to have to raise the cost of my
goods or eliminate jobs, if no one really knows if air pollution
is all that harmful? Show me the proof, an air polluting
company may demand.
Realistically, it wont be until critical mass is achieved that the
hoped for choice of unity and cooperation will be a viable one.
Only when the earth as a whole is so polluted that life itself
becomes increasingly difficult for a majority of the worlds
people will there likely be the political will to force global
environmental laws on governments worldwide. But the
optimists (read: environmental activists) among us continue to
believe that the world can be shown the error of its ways. They
continue to point out that the sky is probably falling--or at

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least developing a big hole. The world, as a whole, ignores
them.
One would hope, however, that governments, perhaps
through a strengthened U.N., could somehow be forced to
realize that when the Earth reaches the critical mass of
pollution, it may be too late to do anything about it. That
would be a common tragedy indeed.
Comments:
This excellent response displays an in-depth analysis of the
issue, conveyed through the skillful use of language.
While acknowledging that environmental problems are
serious and of global dimensions, the discussion explores the
complexity of international cooperation. Such cooperation,
the paper argues, runs into a variety of problems, and the
writer offers persuasive examples to support that point:
-- the unwillingness of nations to interfere with other nations
through
political measures such as restriction of foreign aid
-- inadequate environmental regulations, which are caused
both by the
differential impact of polluting activities between countries
and

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regions and by the difficulty of comparing the long-term
effects of
polluting actitivities with the more easily documented,
short-term
costs of reducing pollution.
The paper distinguishes itself in part by its excellent
organization. The first paragraph analyzes the claim and
announces the writers position; the second and third
paragraphs provide clear examples supporting that position.
The skillful use of a quotation from a business person vividly
illustrates the economic impact of pollution controls. The last
two paragraphs bring a sense of closure to the essay by
continuing the theme announced in the first paragraph -- that
cooperation must wait until more dire circumstances produce
the political will necessary to reduce pollution.
Transitional phrases -- because, however, for instance -- help
guide the reader through the argument. Also, effective
sentence variety and the use of precise vocabulary help clarify
meaning and confirm the score of 6.

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