rescue[英语四级作文]英语四级写作范文赏析

2021年1月10日发(作者：吴佳尼)
　　四级作文题目：

　　Directions: For thispart, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay. You should start your
essaywith a brief description of the picture and then express your views onwater pollution. You
should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

　　四级作文：

　　范文一：

　　In this picture it show us about two fishes dialogue. We can know the water was not so
fresh because the fishes can't live in there more than three days.

　　From this short dialogue in picture we need though, why fish want to told other fishes can't
use the water. It was obviously that the water was been polluted.

　　Nowadays, with the country develop, lots of factory in order to get much money and more
convenient, then put the water that was polluted into the river.

　　Water is the source of full life. We need clean water,so do animals.

　　Why we so selfish to make little money then make the water dirty. It also harmful for us. We
should tell everyone protect animals is also means protect us.

　　评分：4分

　　评语：基本切题，连贯性差，大部分句子都有错误，有较多的 严重语言错误，如第一
句it是第三人称单数，后面的动词show应该是shows，且用法是sho w sb. sth.，about不
需要；第二段的两句话都存在语法错误，want to told ，was been polluted等；一些句子缺
少谓语，如It also harmful for us。

　　范文二：

　　water pollution

　　As is vividly showed in the picture, a fish told to another fish the water of sea can't be used
for three days and hope each fish knows that then to leave there. The implied meaning of the
picture should be taken into account seriously. Then the reason is that the human pollute the
water and at last fishes have no place to live.

　　In my opinion, we need take some measures to reduce water pollution. To begin with that,
we know some factories sewage in the river in order to saving more money. So the government
should make the law to impose restrictions on the factories' discharge capacity. Secondly, we
should have a award of protecting the water. In our daily life, we should use the detergent