上演作文范文之冰果英语作文

2021年1月22日发(作者：adorable)
冰果英语作文


【篇一：冰果英语作文系统使用说明
(
学生用户
)
】


冰果英语作文系统使用说明

2010
级所有本科生从下周开始 ，在冰果作文智能评阅系统上定期完
成作文，要求每周一篇。具体操作如下：


一、

在地址栏里输入
,
进入冰果英语智能作
文评阅系统， 点击
“
学

生
”
进入后：

1.
点击
“
浏览作文
”
，找到天津地区的高校；

2.
点击
“
天津大学
”
进入（不是
“
天津大学人 文学院
”
）；

3.
在
“
该学校的老师有”
标签下，找到读写译老师给出的教学班号
（通常为该生

所在读写译班 的教学班号），如
“4485”
，点击进入，
页面上就会列出该班每周

需完成的作文题；

4.
注意作文的
“
有效日期
”
，在本周需完成的作文右面，点击
“
写作
文
”
；

5.
仔细阅读作文题以及写作文的注意事项，提交作文前，务必准确
无误填写学号，

姓名，学校名和班级（为所在读写译班教学班号），
否则将没有成绩；

6.
学生可以在完成步骤
“3”
之后出现的页面中，点击
“
完成情 况
”
，然
后输入学

号，即可查询作文的审阅情况；


二、如果点击进入了该系统的新版本，参照下列说明：

1.
在
“
学生用户
”
下方，点击
“
不记得序列号了？
”
，找到
“
天津
”
；

2.
点击“
天津大学
”
进入（不是
“
天津大学人文学院
”
）；

3.
在
“
老师姓名
”
栏内准确无误地 输入读写译老师给定的教学班号
（通常为该生所在读写译班的教学班号），找到所在班，点击进入；
4.
注意截止时间，在需完成的作文下部点击
“
进入
”< br>，进入到写作文
界面；

5.
仔细阅读作文题以及写作文的注意事 项，提交作文前，务必准确
无误填写学号，姓名，学校名和班级（为所在读写译班教学班号），
否则将没有成绩；

6.
在步骤
“1”
后，即可看到有两种方式可以查询作文成绩，自由选择；


备注：

a)

b)

c)

d)

【篇二：冰果英语智能作文系统】



冰果英语智能作文系统

4
篇
14
分以上作文

仅供参考学习


作文序列号
12991
得分：
14.1 / 15
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您提交的作文：


标题：
the tenth assignment


正文：

my suggestions to english teachers

to begin with i think it necessary to make a small summary of
the great deal of things that i’ve learnt during this semester. it
can be divided into three parts according to the

respective courses. first of all, the english reading and writing
course has greatly trained such skills of mine, the
explanations given by the teacher was in explicit english,
followed by numerous good examples of phrases. apart from
some exercises we’ve done on class, every student was
required to complete an essay weekly, which furthermore
improves our writing skills.


personally, i think i’ve benefited most from the online course,
which provides me with a platform on which i can fully practice
my listening and reading, especially when i have to use logic
and reason to do exercises and tests on it.


besides, on the oral english class, i’ve been granted of a
wonderful opportunity to make a presentation in public, a
formal one which i’ve never tried before. it’s really exciting to
deliver such a speech, which has been a very rewarding
experience.


so here, i’d like to give some advice on each course so that
they can better live to student’s academic expectations.

the listening class is really good; thanks to the modern
facilities the school has given us. we always enjoy the english
videos displayed before and after class, but i think if there
were a resting time between class and class, the students
would be more concentrated on the whole. in addition, if the
records listened on class were played only once, in the same
form of the c
et exams, i believe we’d be better prepared for
those tests.

the oral class is my favorite, so i hope there would be more
interaction between student and teacher. it comes well if we
can play some word games together, and we can communicate
easier with each other.

as for the reading and writing class, i strongly suggest that
the teacher could introduce us more english movies, as long
as it does not conflicts with the requisites of the course.

that will add points to the whole impression of the class, as
many students just lack sufficient attention and interest.


得分：
14.1 / 15
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评语：
congratulations. nobody is perfect but the language in
your essay is pretty good. youve succeeded with flying colors
in structure and vocabulary. your essay shows that you are
very knowledgeable about the topic.


作文序列号
12990
得分：
14.4 / 15
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您提交的作文：


标题：
the ninth assignment


正文：

cars in the city


cars, as a very significant way of transportation in today’s
society, are introduced to more and more urban families year
after year. it’s not uncommon of there being more than one car
in a single medium-class family. the possession of a car is
almost essential for every income earner, in order to satisfy
the increasing need of moving more conveniently and
efficiently around the city.

either to go to school or go to work, going by car will certainly
save a lot of time, besides being provided a rather comfortable
space despite a terrible weather.

however, with the rising petrol price, cars are becoming a
financial burden for their

owners, not to mention the cost of the car itself. neglecting all
this, the best advantage of cars is weakened with the
unbearable long traffic jams that drive all of us crazy.

it is just one side of the problems that cars are causing.
instead of favoring a better transportation atmosphere, it is
becoming the number one culpable for today’s traffic problems.
everything that’s to
o excessive is surely bad thing, so do cars.
too many cars create congestion, harming the traffic’s health.

apart from that, the gases that a car discharges are usually
harmful to the environment. the carbon dioxide, for example,
contributes to the global warming, which leads to
environmental crisis of more seriousness.

therefore, actions should be taken in order to rid the problems
that cars are causing. fist of all, we should be fully aware of the
consequences of owing a car. in fact, owing a car is like having
a child. you have to be responsible for it. if you won’t use it
very often, you’d better choose a public means of
transportation rather than a personal vehicle.

secondly, the government should provide more public
transportations for citizens, such us

building rail-way lines, hiring more taxis, providing more buses,
etc. in this way, people would be willing to use them, which are
cheaper and convenient. if more people do this, there would be
more free spaces in our cities, without the pressure of building
more parking lots.

last but not least, we need to protect our environment.
restoring its original state may be difficult, but if we plant more
trees and buy less cars, i think the day when we’ll see a more
beautiful world is not very far.


得分：
14.4 / 15
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评语：
nobody is perfect but the language in your essay is
pretty good. your essay shows varied structure and wide range
of vocabulary. your essay shows that you are very
knowledgeable about the topic. congratulations.


您需要注意这些单词的拼写：
transportations,


作文序列号
12359
得分：
14.8 / 15
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您提交的作文：


标题：
the eighth assignment


正文：

getting to know the world outside the campus


there’s an increasing necessity for college students to learn
how to integrate themselves to the society in near future. today
when you enter a chinese university, especially a well- known
one, it gives you the impression that most students are mainly
absorbed in their studies, leaving no time to explore the world
outside the campus.

whether or not this constitutes a mayor risk for their future
career development is not the only worrisome issue. what is
more alarming is the fact that some students are losing
aspirations not only in studies but also in their future positions
in society.

there is, fortunately, a wide range of ways for one to learn to
integrate into the society. the public media for example,
provides an explicit introduction for the individual to find out
what everything happening everyday is about, and is also
persuasive in the way that it encourages students make their
minds to become part of the society from now on.

another two ways to learn about the society are volunteering
and social practice. both of them can help the student get rid
of his immaturity, and sign for a lighten experience of helping
others. the minute the student join in such activities, he will
get access to a wealth of knowledge about interpersonal
relationships, something he would never become acquainted
through textbooks.

besides, the volunteering experiences will greatly change the
judgment of the individual toward society. because there is
still a lot to be done, and every effort offered will be
appreciated, the student will be more committed to serve the
society in the future.

i think sometimes we students tend to overestimate our ability
to integrate into society. the fact that our current lifestyles are
relatively relaxed in comparison with our

high-school ones makes us more likely to be contented with
what we already have, and forget the purpose we resolved to
effort.

therefore i think the first thing i should do is to take the matter
of become part of society seriously. after all, there’s no how
-to
book that tells me the right way to get involved, but only that
unique experience id create myself. the situation urges me to
act so that i must waste no

time to pick up all that knowledge through volunteering, social
practice, the pubic media, daily communications with others,
etc.

only by being conscious of what we lack can we put the effort
to make up for that debility, which in this case, is our