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读后续写高分作文的写作方法指导
（以衡水中学四月联考英语作文为例）
江苏省丰县中学上课讲义
2020
正文指导
版本一：
But no more
helicopters came
and
it was
getting dark
again.
But no more
helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The ceiling of thick branches shut out
the sky and covered the path in darkness. Jane looked around blankly, a shiver of
alarm
going through her. Soon the full moon rose, large, round and clear, shining in the deep
blue.
“
Why not pick stones from the stream and make them in the form of SOS?
”
cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. Having finished it, she
felt
so exhausted and slept beside the stones. Tomorrow will be another day.
It was
daybreak when Jane woke up.
Birds were chirping, the branches swaying to the
rhythm of the wind, and the leaves fluttering like graceful butterflies. A ray of hope
rose
naturally in her heart. Suddenly, the buzzing of the helicopter came overhead again. It
did
saw her waving yellow blouse and most important the SOS. Upon its landing, so
thrilled
was she that she threw herself at Tom and hugged him tightly, tears of joy welling up
in
their eyes.
“
I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?
”
“
Yes, in our heart.
”
版本二：
But
no more
helicopters came
and
it was getting dark again. The trees
cracked and
groaned in the dark. A thrill of alarm came through Jane. Eventually, she determined
on spotting
an open area, awaiting another helicopter. She stumbled her way through the horrible
forests
and climbed to a high place. No time to waste. After she flagged her yellow blouse,
Jane sank to
the ground, anguished and defeated. Gazing at the sky, Jane recalled Tom and tears
blurred her
eyes. Terrified as she was, she fell fast asleep in the was daybreak when Jane
woke up. And, as luck would have it, a helicopter just came by!
Jane yelled and skipped, waving her yellow blouse. To her great joy, the helicopter
noticed her
and landed. What astounded her most was that it was Tom who sat in the helicopter!
Out rushed
Tom. A huge smile spread across Jane's face and the couple hugged tightly for a long
time. It
was the narrow escape that made Jane perceive that love was priceless. Over the
next years, a
change came over the couple. Reasoned discussion replaced fierce arguments and
politeness
replaced contrariness. They treasured the life and love more.
结论是：
1.
首先要找到
con flict
在哪里，然后最多五句话说清楚
solution
。
解决方案不包括心情和环境描
写。第一篇昨天文章里已经分析过，下面只说第二篇：
Solution: She stumbled her way through the horrible forests and climbed to a
high place.
a helicopter just came by.
Out rushed Tom.
看起来就非常简单，无非
就是：找空地失 败；天亮飞机又来了；夫妇重逢。
2.
其次围绕
solution
，进行心情 和
环境描写的铺垫
，以上两篇都是非常好的例子。第一篇昨天已
经分析过，第二篇的分
析：
第一段：
环境描写烘托恐惧：
The trees cracked and groaned in the dark. A thrill
of alarm came
through Jane.
心情描写：
Jane sank to the ground, anguished and defeated.
Gazing at the sky, Jane
recalled Tom and tears blurred her eyes. Terrified as she was, she fell fast asleep
in the
wild.
第二段：心情描写：
A huge smile spread across Jane's face and the couple
hugged tightly for a long
time.
但这篇的结尾太多的议论不合适，需要大胆舍弃部分，这样也不会超出太多的
字数。
）卷考联月四学中水实战：
（衡．
Paragraph 1: On the Christmas eve, Cathryn received a call, which said to return the
pet to her at the park gate.
Praagraph 2: Just then Mary recognized the thief was her boyfriend.
写作指导
Conflict
--
Solution
：构思节一、情本文的
conflict: find the thief; how to treat him
，而
solution
就要分两种：
forgive or not to
forgive?
：句
3
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5
话用最简洁的都哪无论选择种
solution
，要
。
Cathryn
去
陪
。现小偷出
2.
。去走们上前他
3.
。释解偷小
4.
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