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书面表达之读后续写
序号
题型
Part 1
解密高考
Part 2
对点解密
Part 3
强化集训
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【考点综述】
读后续写是随着我国高考改革由教育部考试中心研制的英语高考新题型，
2016
年
10
月在浙江省首次
使用。该题型通过读写结合，检测学生的 英语书面语言理解与表达能力。要求学生能够梳理故事文体的结
构、分析故事发展的线索、想像故事发展 的情节以及续写故事的发展和结局。
从试题结构看，读后续写评价的是书面理解能力和书面表 达能。因此，在写作之前，首先读懂文本，理清
故事情节，然后构思故事的发展和结局。
【备考建议】
第一步：通读文本，提取线索词和信息句，写出每段段落大意。
第二步：根据文本每段内容，结合所给续写部分的首句，构思完整的故事情节。
第三步：根据续写部分所提供的首句，写出续写部分每段的段落大意，围绕续写
部分的段落大意进行合理的细节描写。
第四步：润色成篇。
真题
考点综述
备考建议
考点精准说
1...
真题对点析
1...
对点模拟练
1...
真题模测、典题模测
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对
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解
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【真题对点析】
1
（
2020
·全国新高考
1
）
阅读下面材料
,
根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段
,
使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had
lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet
the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew
they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his
wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had
interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother.
He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I
wish we could help him to earn
money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a gre
at idea! I have
a solution that we can all help accomplish(
完成
).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you
what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us
? Well, we can make popcorn(
爆米
花
), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意
:
1.
续写词数应为
150
左右
:
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
______________ __________________________________________________ ____________________________
__________________ __________________________________________________ ________________________
______________________ __________________________________________________ ____________________
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
____________________________________ __________________________________________________ ______
________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __
____________________________________________ ________________________________________________【范文】
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’
s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
So, they went to the local supermarket
together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of
popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell
the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this
family.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
He took the popcorn around to the houses and
sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self- dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs.
Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt
to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of
Meredith
’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
【解析】
本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。
1.
认真读懂所给提供的材料
:
善良的
Meredith
一家住在一个小社区里 ，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的
男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男 孩
Bernard
也做不了什么事情，生活十分
困难。后来，
Meredit h
的孩子想出了一个主意
--
制作爆米花，让
Bernard
去卖爆 米花。
2.
根据所给材料确定文章主题
:Meredith
如何通 过制作和卖爆米花帮助
Bernard
一家摆脱困境的。
3.
续写 部分和前面的文章衔接得上，
并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，
故事情节的向后延续发展 要合
乎情理。
4.
根据第一段首句
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(
当
Meredith
太太
听到
John
的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意
)
可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展 开构思；
根据第二段
首句
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(
一切准备就 绪后，
Bernard
开始了他的新生
意
)
可以针对
Ber nard
如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
5.
续写的语言要尽 可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。
文章时态以一般过去时为主。
应使用自己熟悉的句
型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，
以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。
【对点模拟练】
1
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为
150
左右。
I woke at 5:30 A
．
M. after a restless night’s sleep. I slowly unzipped the tent door to inspect the new day. Just
like yesterday, the wind had dropped. It was another beautiful Arctic day. I crawled out of my sleeping bag
unwillingly. I am normally a morning person but the intense cold outside made that morning most unappealing.
Anyhow, it was time to greet Charlie and start the day.
My dog Charlie was up and it was bouncing up and down at the end of his chain looking well rested. I poured
what looked like a pound of dog food into his bowl.
Stepping out of the tent, I looked around for bears or tracks and saw none. It would never be a good thing to meet
a polar bear. An Inuit (
因纽特人
) once told me that I should watch out for polar bears. He said that if I met a polar
bear, I should keep the following rules in mind. First, keep eye contact, move sideways or slightly forward, never
backward, stay calm. Do not show fear and stand beside a large object to make myself appear as large as possible.
Weapons like flare gun(
信号枪
) are necessary, but do not shoot unless forced to. Don’t wound a bear, or you'll make
it even more dangerous, and never run.
It was only six o’clock, so I decided to have a leisurely
breakfast of a bowl of milk powder, coconut flakes, and
butter mixed with warm water. I sat on my sled
（雪橇）
to enjoy my first breakfast of the expedition only to find that
after the third spoonful it was frozen. So much for leisurely breakfasts! I added more warm water and ate the rest as
fast as possible.
Suddenly I heard a deep, long growl coming from Charlie’s throat. In a flash I looked at him and then in the
direction in which he was staring. It was a female polar bear followed by two cubs
（幼崽）
slowly, purposefully,
toward me. They were two hundred yards away.
Paragraph 1:
With my heart quickening, I grabbed my loaded flare gun and carefully walked sideways a few steps to Charlie.
________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________
____________ __________________________________________________ ______________________________
________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________
____________________ __________________________________________________ _________
Paragraph 2:
The whole event lasted fifteen minutes but seemed years long.
__________________________________________________ __________________________________________
____ __________________________________________________ ______________________________________
________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________
____________ __________________________________________________ _________________
【范文】
With my heart quickening, I grabbed my loaded flare gun and carefully walked sideways a few steps to Charlie.
Without taking my eyes off the bear, I led him to the sled and fastened his chain to a rope. The bear was getting closer.
Remembering all the Inuit had told me, I fired a warning shot to the bear
’s left. But on she came. Then, I fired a flare
right in front of her. She stopped and looked at me. Then she fixed her eyes on Charlie, who was barking wildly. She
looked back at her cubs and waited for them to catch up, then finally moved away toward my right.
The whole event lasted fifteen minutes but seemed years long. My hands were shaking as I stood still, watching
the three slowly move north. But despite the fear, I could feel deep down inside a real satisfaction. I now knew that I
could stand up to a bear in the wild and stay calm enough to function and still remember the words from the Inuit.
With Charlie’s help I had passed my first test.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者早上从北极的帐篷 中醒来，给他的狗
Charlie
喂了
食，走出帐篷没看到任何熊的踪迹，想起因纽特 人说的遇到熊的做法，因为时间还早所以决定悠闲地吃一
顿早饭，突然看到一只母熊带着两只幼崽向自己 走来。
【详解】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是
：
心 跳加快，我抓住信号枪，小心地向一边的
Charlie
走了几步……所以
应该写作者 看到熊后的反应，即走向
Charlie
把它拴在绳子上，抓住信号枪向熊开枪警告，熊听到枪 声后的
反应及
Charlie
看大熊后的反应内容等。
第二段开头是：
整个事件持续了十五分钟，
但似乎是持续了几年……
本段应该熊离开后作者的反应，比如是否 会感到害怕
，
以及从这次与熊的相遇中的收获等内容。
续写时要求使用5
个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当
的 时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为
150
左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出 你所使用
的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
take off
，
in front of
，
move away
等高级词汇；
that I could
本文描写详略得当，
使用了高级词汇和高级句子。
如：
stand up to a bear in the wild and stay calm enough to function and still remember the words from the Inuit
引导的
宾语从句，
as I stood still
引导的伴随状语从句，
With my heart quickening...with
复合结构等高级句式。
【真题对点析】
2
（
2018
·浙江省高考真题）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A Vacation with My Mother
I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother---loving,
sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks
driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my
eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-
bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again?
Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent
into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the
purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept:
“You stand outside the door and play lookout(
放哨
) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while
you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh…I thought they were
being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time,
Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely
-looking backyard and ask if we could set up
tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand
our objections(
反对
). If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She
thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数应为
150
左右；
2.
至少使用
5
个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；
4.
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.
______________
Paragraph 2:
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.
______________
【范文】
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.
Thinking of this tent, Mom suggested that
we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed.
When the door of our car opened, Mom stormed out instantly and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked
to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mom had already lain down the grass
comfortably in front of the tent, talking merrily with a local boy at our age, who kept glancing at this tent curiously.
Soon we learnt that the boy in rags even didn’t have a home to live in. Of course, Mom “forgot” to take this tent with
us again.
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way
. And we also had a nice time living with
my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by
Mom. Though she did love going camping, she presented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy. It was Mom
that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of giving.
【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父 母所居住的地方，
途中发生了有趣的事情。
【详解】
首先，根据 文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：
我们在露营 过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事
(
尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个
fo rgetful
的
人，
这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的 趣事
)(
也有同学在此处描述了露营过程
中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现
nice
这一个点
);
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：
此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不
能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可 以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色
(
同时回忆往事
)
，最终把故事的
落脚点放在
“
家人的感情
”“
亲情
”“
生活的乐趣
”“
与妈妈一起的趣事
”
等等角度都可以的
;
当然也有同学描述与
陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题
;
总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写 的角度比较多
;
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点 ：字迹清晰程度，语法多样
性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度
;
高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程
度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断
;
说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓
语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免 句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生
对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章 写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式
:
虚
拟
语
气
和
with
复
合
结
构
Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering
her enthusiasm, we all agreed. what
引导的主语从句和
which
引导的非限制性定语从句
But what impressed me
most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
【对点模拟练】
2
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
faster! Her husband encouraged her.
To help Amy stay healthy, her husband had been running with her for over two years. Several years ago, Amy
could barely walk down the stairs of her apartment building due to fatness caused by eating disorders. She realized the
problem after a failed job interview and began walking to improve her ability to move. At first, she could walk for
only 15 minutes at a time. But she pushed herself every day, walking 5 minutes longer than she did the day before
until she walked for an hour and eventually two. For three years, Amy kept her walking habit, slowly and
painstakingly building her body shape. Then she changed her walking shoes to running shoes about two years ago and
became an excellent runner.
In March 2001, an advertisement invited people to nominate
（提名）
an ordinary person who inspired them to
bring the Olympic flame to Salt Lake City as torch bearers
（火炬手）
or support runners.
（
Support runners serve as
“guardians o
f the flame
）
Amy's experiences touched her husband, so
he nominated her to be a torch bearer. The possibility to be selected was low, but Amy wanted to try.
Running taught Amy the importance of training for a race. She pictured herself running a race and crossing the
finish line. For months, she ran through her neighborhood carrying a broken-off broom handle, feeling the weight of
the torch. She waved at her neighbors, pretending they were cheering crowds. She also printed a picture of a torch
bearer wearing the white uniform, replaced the face with a picture of hers, and put it onto her refrigerator door.
Every day, Amy imagined herself as a torch bearer. She was training for a historic running event. On September
26th, while on her daily run through her neighborhood, an express package arrived.
注意：
1.
续写词数应为
150
左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Amy opened it and found a letter and a book on the Olympics.
___________ __________________________________________________ _______________________________
_______________ __________________________________________________ _________________________
Paragraph 2:
___________________________ __________________________________________________ _______________
_______________________________ __________________________________________________ _________
【范文】
Paragraph 1:
Amy opened it and found a letter and a book on the Olympics. The letter read,
selected as a support runner for the Olympic Torch Relay...
wasn't disappointed. She completed the required physical examination, delivered the forms, and waited. Months later,
another package arrived. It contained her official blue support runner uniform along with instructions for her part of
the relay. Then on a cold day, Amy and her husband stood outside the Torch Relay collection point.
Paragraph 2:
runner will become a torch bearer. Select a person now.
Holding it tight, she
ran down the street filled with people waving flags. The Olympic theme song was broadcast. Amy smiled and waved
to the crowds, knowing that she was carrying not only the torch, but also the Olympic spirit.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，几 年前，艾米由于饮食失调导致肥胖，几乎走不下公寓楼的楼梯。在丈夫的帮助
下，慢慢地恢复身材，并成 为一名优秀的跑步运动员。在看了一则广告后，丈夫鼓励艾米去竞选奥运火炬
手。为此，艾米把自己想象 成火炬手，一直为此训练，直到有一天，一个快递包裹到达。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头 是：艾米打开它，发现了一封信和一本关于奥运会的书。本段应该写艾米
看到信上写着自己被选为奥运火 炬接力的助跑员。她完成体检几个月后，又来了一个包裹，里面是正式的
蓝色助跑服，还有她那部分接力 的说明，终于到了火炬接力的那一天。第二段开头是：“今天的火炬手中
有一个不能胜任她的角色，”接 力组织者宣布。本段应该写艾米在挥舞着旗帜的人们中，跑去接过火炬，
奥运主题曲播出了，艾米微笑着 向人群挥手致意，她传递的不仅是火炬，还有奥林匹克精神。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为
150
左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
be selected as
，
run down
，
fill with
等高级词汇；
本文描写详略得当，
使 用了高级词汇和高级句子。
如：
Although
she
wouldn't
be
wearing
the
white
uniform,
she
wasn't
disappointed.
让步状语从句的运用；
Amy smiled
and waved to the crowds, knowing that she was carrying not only the torch, but also the Olympic spirit.
宾语从句
的运用
等高级句式。
【真题对点析】
3
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