写一篇题为“Changes in My Hometown”的英语短文

2021年1月26日发(作者：theremin)
写一篇题为
“Changes in My Hometown”
的
英语短文




请你按照下面表格的提示，写一篇题为
“Changes
in
My
Hometown”
的英语短文
,
开头已给出。



内容要点



过



去



旧房子



现



在



高楼



河水肮脏



河水清澈



步行、骑自行车上班



乘公交车、开小汽车上班



要求：
1.
以今昔整体对比的方式写一篇短文；



2.
或者以单项对比的方式写一篇短文；



3.
词数：
80
词左右（包括已经写出的单词）
。
Changes in
My Hometown


Over the past 10 years, great changes have taken place in
































































my
hometown.
In
the
past,
____________________________________ _______________
_______________________________ ____________________
__________________________ _________________________
_____________________ ______________________________
________________ ___________________________________
___________ ________________________________________
______ _____________________________________________
_ _____________________________________

分析：本篇作文的题目和要点已经给定，有两种写法，
一是今昔整体对比，也就是先说明过去的总体 情况，再说明
现在的总体情况；二是单项对比，也就是先说明过去的房子
是什么样子的，而现在 的房子是什么样子的，按照不同的比
较项目逐一列举。最后也可通过对比，表达自己对家乡变化
的喜悦之情或对家乡的热爱。



在选词方面，
同学们可灵活运用本单元重点结构
used to
do/be
或
there used to be/do
，注意正确使用一般过去时。



习作

1
：



Over the past 10 years, great changes have taken place in
my
hometown.
In
the
past,
the
houses
were
very
①
old.
The
river used to be very dirty. People used to walk or ride bikes to
work.
But
now
things
are
different.
Many
people
live
in
tall
buildings.
②
The
river
is
so
clean
that
people
can
swim
in
it.
People take buses or drive their own
③
car to work.



I am happy to see that my hometown is becoming more and
more beautiful.


教师点评




这是以今昔整体对比方式写的一篇习作。



得分点



（
1
）完整地将表格提示内容进行了表述，基本无语言
错误。②处这句话摆脱了简单的罗列陈述，使短文显得比较
灵活。


（
2
）在内容完整的基础上，结尾表达了个人情感，为
短文增色不少。



失分点



③

此处应该使用复数形式
cars
。



提示



①此处用此除了选用
old
外，根据表 格提示，旧房子也
指房子的状况不佳，可选用用
poor
。



习作

2
：



Over the past 10 years, great changes have taken place in
my
hometown.
In
the
past,
the
houses
in
my
hometown
were
very old
，
①
but now many people have moved into tall buildings.
The water in the river used to be very dirty
，
but now the river is
very clean. People used to walk or ride bikes to work
，
but now
they go to work by bus or by car.



The
life
of
people
in
my
hometown
is
much
better
than
before. Best wishes to my hometown.


教师点评




这是以单项对比的方式写的一篇习作。



得分点



（
1
）内容完整，无语言错误，能正确使用本单元目标
语言。



（
2
）①处这句话是短文所要描述的变化动了起来，体
现了句式多样化。



（
3
）表达了个人对家乡的感情与祝愿。



提示



短文中每处对比都是用了
but,
选词单一。可省略一两
处。






【拓展练笔】



1
、
Jack
以前在 学习上不愿下功夫，学习成绩也不好。
在朋友
John
的帮助下，
他的学习有 了明显进步。
请根据下表
的内容提示，写一篇短文。
Jack


过去



经常上学迟到，不认真听课
,
不认真完成作业
……



现在



在
Jack
的帮助下，认真学习
……



John


关心
Jack
，和他谈心；帮助他复习功课、解决问题



要求：
1.
短文应包括表中所有要点，不要逐字翻译，可
适当发挥。



2.
简单表述自己对这一问题的看法。



_____ ______________________________________________
__________________________________________________ _
_____________________________________________ ______
________________________________________ ___________
___________________________________ ________________
______________________________ _____________________
_________________________ __________________________
____________________ _______________________________
_______________ ____________________________________
__________ _________________________________________
_____ ______________________________________


One possible version:


Jack
is
a
student
at

School.
He
lives
with
his
uncle
because his parents work in another city. He does really well in
his
subjects.
But
he
used
to
be
a
“problem
student”.
He
was
always late for school. What was worse, he didn
’
t listen to the
teachers carefully in class and he never finished his homework
on
time.
His
teachers
and
classmates
were
very
worried
about
him. John
，
a top student in the class, decided to do something to
help him. He used to talk with Jack every afternoon after school.
He did his homework at Jack
’
s home so that he can help his
with his problems and help him review his lessons. At the end of
the
school
year
，
Jack
did
better
in
the
exams,
he
made
great
progress. Now, with the help of John
，
Jack is careful about his
lessons, he is trying his best to do it well. John now is Jack
’
s
best friend. I think Jack is really lucky, he got two things ---true
friendship and good grades.


2
、马上就要初中毕业进入高中了
,
你是否还记得丰富多
彩的小学生 活，小学生活与你现在的学习生活有什么区别
吗？请以此为主题写一篇
80
字左右的短 文。



_____________________________ ______________________
________________________ ___________________________
___________________ ________________________________
______________ _____________________________________
_________ __________________________________________
____ _______________________________________________
_________________________________________________ __
____________________________________________ _______
_______________________________________ ____________
__________________________________ _________________
_____________________________ ______________


One possible version:


My
life
has
changed
since
I
became
a
middle
school
student. When I was in primary school
，
I used to study fewer
subjects
，
but now I have nine. I used to spend some time playing
games with my little friends after school
，
but now I have to go
home and do my homework. I used to like tests
，
but now I feel
stressed out
，
I don
’
t like them so much. Now I get up early and
stay in school all day, I am tired of the school life now.


3、假如你叫李海
,
是光明学校的学生，请根据下面的提
示向你的笔友
Ti na
写封信
,
简单介绍学校近年来的变化。



内容要点：
1.
三年前，学校只有一座教学楼、一个室外
操场
,
没有 图书馆；



2.
现在，学校有两座教学楼、一座图书馆、一座办 公楼。
今年新建了室内体育馆。



要求：
1.
注意书信格式；



2.
词数在
100
词左右。