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中考英语满分作文解析:海南卷
2019
年
文段表达
据悉,我国青少年的近视率居全球第
一,
70%
的学生有视力方面的问题.为引起广大青少年的重视,
某英语报刊正在开展以
为题的征文活动.请根据以下提示写一篇短文投稿 ,分析
造成青少年近视的原因并提出保护视力的合理建议.
要求:
1
.语句通顺,意思连贯,语法正确,书写规范.
2
.所有提示须全部用上,并作适当发挥.
3
.文中不得出现真实的人名、校名、地名.
4.
80
词左右(文章开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数).
Saving Our Eyesight
As
the
saying
goes
,
are
the
window
to
the
soul
(心灵
)
,
70%
of
us
have
poor
eyesight
.
What has caused this probl em
?
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In a word
,
lets take care of our eyes so that we can see our bright future
.
2019
年海南中考英语作文以“保护视力” 为话题,话题贴近学生生活。现在学生视力下降已经成为一
个比较严重的问题,同时也受
到了社会的关注,是一个常见的话题。学生在写作时可以联系自己的生活实
际,使学生可
以有话可说,本话题难度较低。学生在写作时一定要注意表达逻辑清楚,思路清晰,注意语
言生动,多用有亮点的句型。
Saving Our Eyesight
As
the
saying
goes
,
are
the
window
to
the
soul
(心灵
)
,
70%
of
us
have
poor
eyesight
.
What
has
caused
this
problem
?
The
main
reason
is
the
bad
habits
of
using
eyes
.
For
example
,
many
of
us
read
in
wrong
positions
,
such
as
reading
in
bed
or
keeping
our
eyes
too
close
to the
book
.
Besides
,
taking less exercise can also cause poor eyesight
.
What's more
,
some of
us spend too much time playing
computer games or watching TV
.
It's bad for our eyes
.
So how can
we
protect our eyes
?
Here is some advice on how to protect our eyes
.
First
,
we should be cautious on the health of using eyes
.
We should not keep our eyes
working
for
a
long
time
.
While
reading
,
we
should
keep
the
book
about
a
foot
away
from
us
.
After
reading
for
an
hour
or
two
,
we
had
better
have
a
rest
by
looking
at
the
plants
in
the
distance
.
Second
,
using less
electronic products is a good way to protect our
eyes
.
Besides
,
we should see green
plants
as
often
as
possible
.
Finally
,
remember
to
do
eye
﹣
protecting
exercises
or
do
more
outdoor
sports
,
which will help us keep good eyesight
.
In a word
,
let's take care of our eyes so that we can see our bright future
.
【名师点评】
2019
年海南 中考英语作文,要求介绍保护视力的重要性和方法,文体为说明文;说明介绍类文章主要
用一般现在时;本文要求谈谈如何保护视力,所以主要使用第一人称
;
词数不少 于
70
词,开头和结尾已给
出,但不计入总词数,文中不
得出现真实的人名、校名。
整体逻辑清晰
,
有条理
;
让人读起来思路很清
晰。
为提
升作文的整体水平,应注意使用一些高级词汇、短语以及复合句、非谓语动词等复杂结构。同时语句
之间使用恰当的连接成分,使文意上下连贯,表达流畅。
【写作亮点】
这是一篇优秀的作文,学生能联
系自己的实际生活,展开合理的论述。短文作者根据题目要求以保护
我们的视力为主题,
采用一般现在时态,作文对学生视力下降的原因做了分析,“
The
main
reason
is
the
bad
habits of using eyes
.
For example...k
.
Besides... What's more p>
,
...
.”条理清楚,语言生动,
第二段,
给出了具体的建议,语篇内容完整。文中多处使用连接词,高级词汇、句型。如【高分句型一】
Besides
,
we should see green plants as often as possible
.【高分句型一】 p>
Finally
,
remember to
do
eye
﹣
protecting
exercises
or
do
more
outdoor
sports
,
which
will
help
us
keep
good
eyesight
.结
尾:表达愿望
2018
年
呼吁大家保护好视力。
2018
年
5
月
5
日上午,第十届海南省“书香节”启动仪式在海南省图书馆举行。为响应
“书香
节”活动,你校校刊英文版正在开展以“
I Like Reading
”为主题的征文活动。请根据下表提示内容写一
篇短文,介绍你对阅读的看法及个人的阅读情况。
要求:
1.
语句通顺,意思连贯,语法正确,书写规范;
2.
必须包含所给提示内容,并做适当发挥;
3.
行文中不得出现真实人名、校名或地名;
4.
不少于
80
词。(短文的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)
Reading makes a full man.
It
’
s important and necessary for everyone to read.
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2018
年海南中考英语作文与以往的作文形 式相比大致相同,要求学生写出阅读的优点以及自己的阅读
习惯等内容,契合学生生活实
际,体现了核心素养下的实践创新,具有时代特色。旨在培养学生的学习能
力以及充分、
合理安排自己业余生活的能力。培养学生爱读书的良好习惯。学生在写作时,要注意把握文
章的体裁
/
人称和时态。
Reading makes a full man.
It
’
s important and necessary for everyone to read. Reading can
open up
our minds and help us get more knowledge.
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