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小学英语五年级上册各单元作文范例及点评
My English Teacher
Miss
Tang
is
my
English
teacher.
She
’
s
very
pretty.
She
is
tall
and
thin.
She
has
two
big eyes and a small mouth.
Her hair is long. She likes cats very much. And
she likes singing
and dancing, too. Her
English is very good. We often play games in
English classes. She is
very kind to
us. We all love her.
【要领点评】
这篇作文的题目 是“我的英语老师”，是一篇介绍人物的作文。小作者开门见山，直接点题，
首先介绍了
英语老师的姓名，然后逐一介绍了她的外貌特征、喜好、英语水平、上课特点以及师生情感
等。
小朋友们在写作文时，
要注意使用自己最熟悉的 词
[
组
]
，
以免写出一些错句子。
写作时要注意意思
连贯、语句通顺、标点正确、书写清晰、规范等。
My Days of the
week
I
’
m
a
student
and
I
am
in
Grade
5.I
get
up
at
six
o
’
clock
every
day.
I
have
breakfast
at half past six, and
go to school
at seven o
’
clock.
I have classes from Monday to Saturday.
I have an English
class on Friday and I have a PE class on Tuesday.
I don
’
t have to go to
school on school, and I like to go
swimming on that day.
【要领点评】
这篇作文的题目是“我的一周”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是从自己的亲身经历写起，叙
述了自己一周七天的所作所为，并特别强调了星期天的喜好，写得自然、流畅。
小朋友们写作文时要注意人称及谓语动词的变化，要依据提示，结合自己的实际，写自己身
边熟悉的事情。
My
Favourite Food
Do
you
know
what
this
is?
Guess!
Its
colour
is
yellow.
It
’
s
long
and
thin.
It
looks
like a small boat and crescent. Oh, it
is a banana. Do you know what that is? Guess
again!
Its colour is orange.
It
’
s round. It looks like a small ball and a small lantern. Oh, it is
an
orange. I like then a lot. I like ice-creams. I
like to chew gum. Chocolates and candies
are yummy. I like them very much.
How about you? What
’
s your favourite food?
【要领点评】
My Favourite Food
是 一篇很成功的文章，小作者并不是简单地列举出自己最喜欢的每一种
食物，而是有详有略
地进行介绍。整篇文章用词准确、语言流畅、没有语法错误。另外，文章中出现了
一些生
词，可见小作者是用心查字典了。
I can help do housework
I am a girl. My name is Li Ling.
I
’
m in Class Three, Grade Five. I
’
m
helpful at home.
I
can
water
the
flowers,
empty
the
trash
and
sweep
the
floor.
After
meals,
I
can
help
my
mother
do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash
the clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?
【要领点评】
本篇作文的题目是“我可以帮助做家务”，作者主要叙述自 己在家帮助做的事情，介绍自己
的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详细，到位。<
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小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲自经历的事情，这样会避免在作文时显得太空，因为只
有自己经常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。写作时还要注意大小写和时态。
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In The
Kitchen
This is the kitchen of my family. It
’
s big and nice. Look! My mother is cooking in
it. This is a microwave
and that is a stove. There is a big table here.
There are many things
on it. What are
these? They look yummy! Oh, they
’
re strawberries. And what are those? They
are grapes.
【要领点评】
这篇作文的题目是“在厨房”里，作者根据自己家的厨房情况。介绍厨房里有微波炉和电炉，
< br>有一张大桌子和桌子上的物品等，以及妈妈在做饭，非常真实。
小朋友 们，可以从观察自己身边的事、物写起，利用所学的句子，描述身边熟悉的东西来
训练习
作。
My
Village
My
village
is
very
beautiful.
There
are
many
houses
in
the
village.
Near
the
village,
there is a forest. A
small river is in front of the village. The water
in it is very clean.
We can see some
fish in the river. Near the river, you can see a
mountain. Some flowers and
grass are on
the mountain. I like my village. Welcome to my
village!
【要领点评】
本文以“我的村庄”为题描述了自己家乡的 风景。介绍了村庄的房屋、森林、河流及大山，
使人看了这篇作文后确实感觉到“我的村
庄”的美丽。小朋友们在写作时，可仔细想一下自己的村庄或
所在城市的特点，尽量使用
本单元学过的单词或短语进行叙述。
小学英语五年级下册各单元作文范例及点评
My weekend
There are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday, I often go to my
dancing class in the morning and do my
homework in the afternoon, and I often help my
mother
do
some
cleaning.
On
Sunday,
I
always
visit
my
grandparents
in
the
morning
and
do
some
reading
in
the afternoon. After dinner, I often watch TV with
my parents. At that time, we can talk
with each other and say something
happily. We often have a good time.
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作 是按照时间顺序记叙周末的活动，
记叙了周六和周日的上午和下午分别做了哪些活动及
< p>对活动的感受。
即：
周六上午：
舞蹈课→下午：
做作业和帮妈妈做清洁→周日上午：
看望祖父母→下午：
阅读
→晚上：看电视，与父母交流→感受：高兴和愉快。我们还可以选取周六和周日中的几个比较主要
的活动来写，
先说明什么时间在什么地方由什么人做了什么事，
有什么感 受。
再按照活动顺序把活动内
容写清楚，最后抒发一下对这次活动或这个
周末的感想。
时态：
这篇短文我们可以用三种时态来写
: a.
一般过去时（主要描述你上个周末是怎样度过的）
;b.
一
般现在时（主要描述你经常怎样度过周末）
;c.
一般将来时（主要描 述你要怎样过周末）。这里我们来
表述平时是如何过周末的，所以采用一般现在时来写。
注意：
活动的相关表达方法可采用旧知识，
< p>eg.（例）起床
get up
，和新知识，
eg. Climb mountains
去爬山中的
un
很容易错写成
nu
。还要注意 不要出现病句，
eg.
“
I
often
watch
TV
with
my
parents.
”
不要写成
“
I often with my parents watch TV .
”
词量上控制在
50 ~ 80
之间。
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My Seasons
We have four seasons in a year. I can do many interesting things in each season. In
spring, the weather is cool and wind, I
can fly kites when it
’
s wind. And I can go hiking
with my family when
it
’
s sunny and cool. I like hiking. Summer is hot in the north of China,
but it
’
s not long time. I often go swimming. It can make me healthy and strong. I can also
wear my beautiful
dresses. Fall is a season with harvest. And I can
eat delicious fruits in
this
season.
I
can
watch
the
leaves
fall.
Winter
comes,
it
’
s
often
snowy
in
winter
in
my
hometown.
When it
snows, everything is white. We can play with snow
and make a snowman, skate and ski.
And
winter
is
my
favourite
season,
because
of
the
Spring
Festival.
I
love
seasons.
I
love
the
nature.
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇短文 是描述“我的四季”，在写法上，是根据春、夏、秋、冬四季的更替来写的，先讲明每
个
季节的特征，
之后再写在这个季节中的主要活动或比较有代表性的活动。
同时讲一 些自己的真实感受，
最后阐述自己最喜欢的季节。在实际的写作的时候我们还可以先写出
自己喜爱的季节及主要的活动内
容，之后再去讲其他几个季节，还可以多讲解一下地域的
季节特征和大自然中的其他景色，如：秋天的
田地里一片金黄，农民在收割等等，这样写
出来的四季更贴近实际。
时态：
这篇习作讲的是“我的 四季”，是比较惯常的一些行为，所以我们最好采用一般现在时和情态动
词结合活动的写
法。即：在什么季节，天气如何，我们可以做什么。
注意：
季节性活动，活动的人，活动的感受等，要求句子顺序要正确，在写作中还要注意关联词的使用，如用
了“因为”，就不能用“所以”，二者不可以同时出现。词量要控制在
8 0
个词以内。
My
Birthday Party
Every
year,
when
it
’
s
birthday,
my
parents
hold
a
party
for
me.
They
invite
my
friend
to come to my house to celebrate my
birthday. I can get many beautiful gifts every
year.
In my party, we can do many
things:
1.
Light the candles.
2.
Sing a
“
Happy Birthday
”
song.
3.
Make a wish.
4.
Blow out the candles.
5.
Cut off the cake.
6.
Eat the cake.
7.
Open the presents.
8.
Sing and dance.
9.
Watch videos or play other games.
10. Say goodbye with each other.
That
’
s my birthday party, is it interesting?
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作是按活动的顺序来写的，
记叙了生日晚会的各项具体活 动，
比较全面。
比较以前几个单
元的写作写法，这个短文
按活动顺序比较合适。
时态：
这篇短文可以用三种时态来写：
1
、一般将来时：主要说明生日晚会份的各项计划，都将如何进行。
2
、一般现在时：主要说明习惯上如何度过每个生日。
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3
、一般过去时：主要说明你的生日晚会是如何进行的。
句型：
invite sb. to do sth.
邀请某人做某事
注意：
由于这篇短文很 有局限性，
所表达的大体上都基本相同，
所以在书写的时候要注意结合自己的实< /p>
际活动与真情实感去写。另外注意一些短语和单词的书写不要发生错误：
eg.
“吹蜡烛”要写成“
blow out the candles
”而不能写成“
blow candles
”。
My
family
There
are
five
people
in
my
family.
They
are
my
grandma,
grandpa,
dad,
mom
and
I.
Look!
Grandma is
watching TV. Grandpa is reading a book. Dad is
writing an e-mail. Mom is cooking
dinner. I am doing my homework. I love
my family!
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作 介绍了自己家的家庭成员，以及此刻他们正在干什么，表达了自己对家人的感情。
时态：
由于本单元主要讲的是现在进行时态，所以建议采用现在进行时态。
< p>
句型：
主语
+be+
动词的现在分 词。
注意：
本单元的重点是现在进行时态，注意在写句 子时要保持时态的完整性，即系动词和动词的
ing
缺一不可。
In the
park
It is sunny today .My mother, my father and I are going to the park. We like the park
very much. It is very big and beautiful
.There are many trees and flowers in it. Many
people
like to go there. Look! An old
man is sitting on the chair. He is reading a book
carefully.
Two boys are jumping on the
ground. Their mothers are talking with each other.
Two birds are
flying in the sky. The
ducks are swimming in the river. They are very
happy. What is the cat
doing? Oh, it is
running after a mouse. It
’
s a poor mouse.
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作是用现在进行时描绘出公园里的人和动物们正在进行的活动还运用了一般现在时叙述了
< p>公园美丽的景色。
时态：
这篇文章可以采 用一般现在时和现在进行时两种时态，
由于本单元的语法项目是现在进行时，
因< /p>
此，描述的重点要放在现在进行时态上。
句型：
一般现在时：主语
+
谓语
+
其他< /p>
现在进行时：（
1
）
What +be (am,is ,are)+
主语
+v.-ing+
其他
?
（
2
）主语
+be(am,is ,are)+ v.-ing+
其他。
A Field Trip
It
is
a
nice
day.
Our
class
will
have
a
field
trip
today.
The
classmates
are
very
excited.
Look! Here we are.
There
’
re a lot of activities to do. Amy is watching insects. Peter is
collecting leaves. They want to write a
report. Mandy is catching butterflies in the
woods.
Tim and Bob are playing chess.
Some of the classmates are having a picnic. There
is a lot of
delicious food to eat. Oh,
who
’
s that over there? It
’
s Miss White. What is she doing? She
is taking photos. We had a very
good time. I
’
ll never forget this field trip.
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作 是按照郊游时的画面来描述的，
记叙了同学们分别在郊游中做了哪些活动及郊游的感受。
时态：
这篇文章可以用一般过去时和现在进行时来写。由于本单 元主要讲的是现在进行时，
所以，
这里
我们采用现在进行
时比较合适。
句型：
××
. is/are doing sth. She /He is doing sth. They
’
re doing sth.
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注意：
活动的相关表述法采用新旧知识相结合去写。注意 时态的转换、描写感受时用一般现在时。
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小学英语六年级上册各单元作文范例及点评
Li Ying
’
S Hobby
Li
Ying
likes
English
very
much.
She
works
hard
at
it.
She
reads
English
every
morning.
She likes speaking English. She often
listens to the radio. She watches TV only on
Saturday
evening.
Does
she
like
dancing?
No,
she
doesn
’
t.
But
she
likes
drawing
and
singing.
Her
parents
love her. And all the teachers and her
friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make
her
happy.
【要领点评】
这一篇写爱好的 文章
,
小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习
,
他没有 具体写到刘莹的某一种爱好
,
而是从学习到课余的多种爱好入手
,
对刘莹的各种爱好进行了粗线条地勾画
.
从
“爱好”
这个角度来看刘
莹的话，我们会觉得这个形象很饱满。
小朋友们写这种“叙事写人”作文时，可以从两个角度下手：一是具体地描绘
；二是和上面小朋友
一样，粗线条地勾画，二者各有所长，另处在行文中使用一些问句，
使用一些转述的话，可以使作文更
有灵气，避免了平铺直叙的缺点。比如上文的“
Does
she
like
dancing?
No,
she
doesn
’
t.
”和“
she
says her hobbies make her
happy.
”就是十分不错的句子，使读者眼前为之一亮。
Don
’
t be against the traffic rules
I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I
must cross two busy roads
.If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I
can
’
t cross the
road ,so
I wait.
If the light turns green, I know it means
“
Go
”
, and then I walk across the road .I
always ride on the
right side of the road .I am never against the
traffic rules.
【要领点评】
这篇作文的题目 是“不要违反交通规则”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是从自己的经历写起，
叙述自己以
什么方式去上学，在上学的路上是怎么做的，很形象。
小朋友们在作文
时注意不要图大，
那样很容易使文章显得空洞，
而要写自己身边熟悉的事情。
要注
意行文中字母的大小写、句子的标点符号等。
I Love My Family
Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father,
my mother,
my brother and I.
My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My
mother
is
a
teacher.
She
works
in
a
school
near
my
home.
She
goes
to
work
by
bike.
After
work,
they like reading books.
Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five
years older than
me. He is a singer.
He
’
s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane.
I love my family.
【要领点评】
一个平凡的题材，一篇生动的作文。这样的命题，我们可能面 对几次，甚至几十次了。但这位
小朋友的笔端很是灵巧，了了数言，让一个幸福的家庭跃
然纸上，很值得我们去思考，我们能做到吗？
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小朋友的这篇作文除了语言优美之外，
在结构上也有闪光 之处。
先总说，
将自己的家人逐个介绍一
遍，后分说，把
家人的工作、上班方式，爱好一一细说。最后以一句话进行概括，起到点题的作用。我
们
在写类似的作文的时候是不是也可以借鉴呢？
How to get to
the science museum
We
are
going
to
the
science
museum
tomorrow.
There
is
an
old
thing
show
in
the
Museum.
Do you know
how we can get to the science museum?
The science museum is next to the People
’
s Park. It
’
s isn
’
t far from our school.
So we can go there on foot
.Walk straight to the west from our school, next
turn left at the
post office and walk
for about 5 minutes, then
turn right
at traffic lights. You can find the
People
’
s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you
’
ll see the science museum.
【要领点评】
这篇作文的题目是“怎样去科学 博物馆”。怎样才算是一篇好作文呢？通过你的叙述，能让别
人很容易找到博物馆，
这应是最基本的要求。
小作者在文中告诉我们什么呢？首先他写了去博物馆的位
置，最后浓墨重彩，指明从学校去博物馆的具体路线，这条路线够清晰吧！
< /p>
小朋友们在写这类作文的时候，总有些无从下手的感觉，不知从何说起。其实介绍路线，无
非就是
告诉他人某段路的起点和终点，还有就是如何从起点走到终点。要给他人说清楚，
你自己首先得清楚，
然后再通过自己的叙述，
将路线清清楚楚得呈现出来 。
一定要注意行文中一些关键的地方，
如在哪儿转
弯，向
哪儿转，经过哪些重要的交通标志或显眼的标志建筑等。这样，你就能说清，别人也能弄明白。
Planting Trees
It
’
s spring. It
’
s time to plant trees.
I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad
helps me plant the tree. First, we dig
the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil.
Next
I water it.
I am so excited and I wait for
the
tree to grow. Two weeks
later, my
tree has some
little leaves. I water it every day.
Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast.
We should plant more trees. They make
our world beautiful.
【要领点评】
小作者写了一次 植树的经历，但他并没有单纯拘泥于植树的过程。既有过程，也有感觉，能使
文章打动读
者，给人以启发。作文的最后一段就非常好，两句话胜似千言万语。我们可以学习一下这种
写法。
既描述过程，又适时提自己的看法或想法的写法，在作文中叫
做“夹叙夹议”
,
描述过程为了提出一种
思想服务，提出
看法或想法使原本平实的描述有了意义。我们在以后的写作中也可以试一试。
Let
’
s have a nice day
It
’
s
Sunday
tomorrow
.I
’
m
going
to
the
bookstore
with
my
friends
tomorrow
morning
.We
are
going
to
look
for
some
good
books
.We
all
like
reading
books
.We
are
going
to
eat
our
lunch
at
the
restaurant.
I
like
chicken,
beef
and
vegetables
.After
lunch,
we
are
going
to
the
Summer
Palace by bus. We are going to play
near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a
boat
on the lake .Wow, that will be
relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.
【要领点评】
怎样才称得上是“美好的一天”？有两点不能忘记，一是安排 得充实，二是安排得有意义。这
两点小作者无疑都想到了，上午去书店看书买书，中午在
饭店吃饭，下午去颐和园玩耍、划船，丰富多
彩！文章以时间为线索，叙述清楚，文笔也
很优美。
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