学生优秀英语习作欣赏

龙源期刊网 http:
学生优秀英语习作欣赏

作者：罗怡娜

来源：《高中生·高考指导》2014年第01期

（一）
Don’tPlayPuppyLove，DearFriend
Wang Li，my good friend，didn’t pass the entrance examination to senior high school，which
irrigated her parents greatly as well as confused some teachers and her classmates. As a good girl like
her，why is theresultlikethat？
Really，she was very good at her lessonswhenshecametojuniorhighschool. What’s more，she
was clever and beautiful. Therefore，everyonelikedher，andthe teachers all thought that she would
be a girl ofgreatpromise.
However，many boys began to write to her and ask her to be their girlfriend. At first，she felt
very nervous and refused them，butlater，shecannotbutacceptoneas her boyfriend. From then on，
she often went outtoplaywiththeboyandwasabsentfromherclass.
As one of her good friends，I tried to persuade her not to fall in love with the boy at such an
early age，but shedidn’y，shebeganfalling behind her classmates in studies
and became tired of having classes. What’s worse，she didn’t do her homework. In the end，she did
poorly in her lessons. As a result，she even failed to be admitted to a senior high school.
Therefore，I think we should learn the lesson from
herandnotgetinloveatanearlyagebecausepuppylove isharmfultoourhealthaswellastoourlearning.
（长沙县实验中学罗怡娜）
【名师点评】
本文以学生早 恋为题材，对具体的事实进行叙述，内容具体、真实，避免空洞的说教，很
有说服力和教育意义。
文章先写结果，然后写过程，最后写作者对此事的看法和感想。文脉清晰，语言流畅， 结
构合理。特别是用一个疑问句“As a good girl like her，why is the result like that”，很好地吸引了
读者的兴趣和注意力。
此外，文章还在以下两个方面做得较好：