寂寞王国24 物品介绍 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略(全国通用版)

2021年1月19日发(作者：姚梦)

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物品介绍

2021
年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）


相关话题素材储备与写作示例指导


对物品物件的描写般包括物品本身的内 容、功他、特点等基本信息，并且该物品住往和某个人或者某
次经历有关，对作者有着特别的意义和重要 性。学生需要在写作中进行客观的描述和主观的评价。


实践案例
1


题目

Write a short passage in at least 60 words about the topic
The best gift I’ve received

审题

这是一篇全命题的说明文，
要求学生对
“
收到的最好礼物
”
进行描 述说明。
写作时可以围绕
what is the gift
，
what is it like
，

和

这几个问题展开。首先写明最好的礼物是 什么，
该礼物来自谁等基术信息。其次，可以对礼物的特点进行简要描写。特别需要注意的是，本文非常 重要的
内容应该是点明为什么这是最好的礼物，即说明该礼物的特殊意义和重要性。

段落结构


本文的结构相对灵活，建议采用三段式，即
“
总一分总
”
的写作结构
:

●
第一段
(
开头
):引出话题，写明收到最好的礼物是什么。

.
第二段
(
中心段< br>):
文章的中心部分。依次说明礼物的特点、对
“
我
“
的意义 等。
●
第三段
(
结尼
):
文章的结尾
段，对全文进 行总结，对礼物的意义进行适当的升华。



mean a lot to sb.
对某人很有意义

give me sth. as a birthday present
给我
...
作为生日礼物

.encourage sb. to do
鼓励某人做
......

the symbol of friendship
友谊的象征

remind sb. of sth.
使
......
想起
......


keep and cherish sth. forever
永远保存珍惜
.....

参考句型


I have never received a better gift before.
我从未收到过更好的礼物。

It has accompanied me for almost ... years.
它已经陪伴我
.....
年
.

.Whenever look at he it, I will think of the old happy days.

每当我看到这个礼物，我就会想起过去的快乐日子。


Wherever I go, I always take it with me
无论我走到哪里，我都带着它。



习作
1

Among all the gifts I have received, the one I like best is a hand made calendar.

It was made by my best friend Jane. She was my my best friend in the junior high school. She gave it to me
when we graduated. On each page of the calendar
，
there is a picture of lane and me with some words written by her.

She tells me how she feels about our friendship and encourages me to try my bet and live a happy life. Whenever
I’ll look at the calendar. I am touched by something warm, and my heart is filled with love.

The calendar is a memory of the wonderful time we spent together in junior high school. I will keep this
special gift forever.



点评
:

这篇习作行文流 畅，
感情真挚动人。
对于礼物
“
日历
”
的描写比较详细具体 ，
使更得读者能够体会作者的
情感。同时，这篇习作结构完整，句式较为丰富，作者使用了定语 从人句、宾语从句、时间状语从句、被
动语态、非谓语等，使全文读来流畅生动。


习作
2

People give gifts to each other to show their love and friendship. For many years, I've always kept a little
puppet which was from one of my old friends, Jane.

She was my next door neighbor and we became best friends soon. On the day when my family moved to a new
apartment, she gave me a lovely glove puppet. The puppet is made of cloth and wears red clothes. She is a cute girl,
so I name her 'Cutie'. She has accompanied me ever since. So Cutie is just like my little sister. When I have some
secrets, I just talk to Cutie and she is like an old friend who understands me. I always share happiness with
I feel unhappy, It's a comfort to tell her my trouble.

Wherever I go, I often take Cutie with me. This is my favorite gift, a common puppet,but she means so much
to me that I will cherish her forever.


点评
:

该生的这篇习作行文连贯， 过度自然。结构完整，安排合理。写作思路清晰，内内容紧扣主题，有真
情实感。语言流畅生动，用词准 确，句式丰富，多处使用定语从句、状语语从句、宾语从句等。


实践案例
2

题目


Write a short passage in at least 60 words about the topic

.


审题

本文的标题
“
我最 喜爱的本书二自了然，要求清晰明确。在写作时，首先需要说明这本书是什么，并可
对其内容、作者信息 等进行简要介绍。其次，必须写明喜欢这本书的原因，比如书的精彩之处，从中的收
获等。


段落结构

本文可采用三段式，即
“
总一分一总
”
的写作结构
:

.
第一段
(
开头
):
引出话题，写明我最爱的书是什么。

第二段
(
中心段
):
文章的中心部分。在这里需要重点闸达为什么喜爱这本书，比如这本书的独特精彩之
处，我从书 中学到了些什么。

第三段结用
:
文章的结尾段，对全文进行总结，成是对书的意义进行适当的升华
.


核心语汇


be full of/ be fled with..
充满
.....


learn sth. from ...
从
......
中
.......
学到
......


be worth reading
值得一读

make me laugh and feel moved
让我欢笑和感动


参考句型

It is the most interesting book that I have ever read.
这是我看过的最有

趣的书。


I like it because it is full of .
我喜欢它因为它充满
....

The reason why I like it best is that I can learn .. from it.
我最喜欢它的原因是，我能从中学到
....


The book consists of .. and is about the story of ...
这本书包括
...
是关于
....
的故事。


习作
1


My favorite book is Harry Potter. I think it is the most interesting and exciting book I have ever read.

I'm sure most people are familiar with the story, which is about Harry and his friends who study at a magic
school. I like reading it because it is full of adventures and learned a lot from it. First, I've learned that
we should be confident and brave enough to overcome any trouble and difficulty just like Harry. Besides, we
should love and protect our friends, We all need friends and we need to get along well with our friends and give
them a hand when they are in need.

Flying and doing some magical tricks are always children's dream. When I'm reading the book, I feel as if my
dream came true. That's why I like the book so much. I'm pretty sure you will like it as well.


点评

这篇习作结构完整，
首尾呼应，
所举的例子也较为详细。文章的正文两部分说明作者喜欢
《哈利
.
波特》
的原因，以及通过阅读该 书学到的道理，但对小说相关内容的介绍偏少了一些。文章的结尾不落俗套，引
入了魔法这一主题，
也十分符合学生的年龄特点。


习作
2

So far, I have read numerous books. Yet the book that I like best is My Life Story.

It was written by an American writer, Helen Keller, a blind and deaf person. In the book, she wrote that she