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2020
年小升初六年级英语作文范文及点评汇总
A Farewell Party
A
Farewell
Party
It
’
s
the
end
of
the
school
year.
The
students
in
Class
Three
have
a
farew
ell
party.
They
invite
their
parents
to
the
party.
Many
students
have
performa
nce
at
the
party.
Look!
Chen
Jie
is
singing
songs.
Zhang
Peng
is
playing
the
piano.
Sarah
i
s
playing
the
erhu.
Mike
is
doing
Chinese
Kung
fu.
What
is
Miss
White
doing?
She
is
dancing.
Everybody
has
a
lot
of
fun.
But
Liu
Yun
isn
’
t
here.
She
has
a
cold.
She
i
s
at
home.
The
classmates
are
going
to
visit
her
after
party.
They
prepare
ma
ny
gifts
fot
her.
And
they
will
take
a
picture
together.
点评：
写法：
这篇习作记叙了一个告别晚会。
记叙了学年末的告别晚会上 大家都表演了什么节
目，以及晚会后大家要去看望刘芸的故事。
时态：
这 篇习作可采用三种时态来写。
由于本单元主要出现的时态是一般将来时和现在
进行时，所以这里我们才用一般现在时，现在进行时和一般将来时来写。
句型：
一般现在时：主语
+
动词原形
+
其他。
现在进行时：主语
+
现在分词
+
其他。
一般将来时：主语
+
be
going
to
/
will
+
动词原形
+
其他。
注意：
由 于本篇文章中所涉及的时态比较多，
所以要注意一下时态的变化。
学生们都在
表演什么节目可以用现在进行时，将要去做什么，
要用将来时。另外还要注意 ，一般现在时
在肯定句中，主语是第三人称单数，谓语动词也要用第三人称单数。
A Post Card from John
A Post Card from John
Dear Sarah,
This
post
card
shows
you
a
picture
from
my
holiday.
We
got
Kunming
on
Wednesday. On
the first day we visited Stone Forest.
It
’
s very beautiful. I love it very
much. On Thursday Kathy and I got lost
in the city. We asked a policeman for help.
He
helped
us
find
the
hotel.
On
Friday
we
went
to
a
small
village.
We
saw
folk
dances and ate some fresh
vegetables from the farm. We enjoyed ourselves.
Last
day we went shopping ane bought
some presents for friends. Tomorrow we will be
back home.
John
【要领点评】
写法：
这是一封明信片，
< p>按照时间顺序记叙了约翰假期去昆明度假这几天的活动。分别
记叙了
游览石林，迷路，看民族舞，购物，买礼物等活动。
时态：这篇文章由于是记叙已经发过的事，所以大部分可以采用一般过去时来写。
句型：主语
+
动词过去式
+
其他。
注意：
描 述已经发生过的事要用一般过去时，
在写这篇文章的时候要注意动词的过去式
的变化，尤其是动词过去式的不规则变化。没发生过的事要用一般将来时。
Tom
’
s Holiday
Tom’s Holiday
Tom
went
to
Beijing
by
plane
on
his
holiday.
Every
day
he
had
fun
with
his
parents. They
went to the Nature Park. They saw elephants. They
went swimming.
They ate lots of
delicious food. They also took many beautiful
pictures. They will
come back home
tomorrow. In a word, they enjoy their holiday.
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作是按照地点的顺序记叙假期里的活动，
记叙了假期里去北京做了哪些活
动以及对活动的感受。
时态：
这 篇文章可采用两种时态来写。
由于本单元主要讲述的是一般过去时的用法，
所
以这里大部分我们采用一般过去时比较合适。
句型：主语
+
动词过 去式
+
其他
??
主语
+will +
动词原形
+
其他
注意：
活动的相关表达法可采用旧知 识和新知识相结合去写，
但要注意动词过去式的变
化规则。例：
eat
的过去式为
ate
，为不规则变化。
Zoom
’
s Weekend
Zoom’s Weekend
Zoom had a busy weekend. On Saturday morning, he washed his clothes and
went to a park. He did his
homework and went fishing on Saturday afternoon.
On
Sunday
morning,
he
cleaned
his
room
and
visited
his
grandparents.
He
played
football and
watch TV on Sunday afternoon. Zoom was too tired.
【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按时间顺序记叙了
Zoom
的 周末活动。
< p>时态：
这篇文章可以用三种时态来写，
由于本单元主要讲的是一般过去时态，
所以我们
采用一般过去时态比较合适。
句型：主语
+
动词过去式
+
过去时间。
注意：活动的相关表达法采用新旧知识结合的方法，但要注意动词过去式的拼写。
A Bad Cold
A Bad Cold
I
’
m not feeling well today. I think I have a bad cold. I have a headache. I have a
fever. My nose hurts. My throat is
sore. I have to take some medicine and stay in
bed. My parents will take me to the
hospital. What a bad cold!
I hope I can be better soon. And I want to go to school.
【要领点评】
写法：
这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙 了得病、
病的症状、
服药及治疗的全过程。写出了
小作者
希望快点康复，好去上学的愿望。
时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时来写。如果主语是第三人称单数，动词别忘 加
s
。
句型：要用
feel
加形容词，和表示“患某种疾病“ 的用法
have+
表示的疾病的单词。
注意：
在表示疾病时，
可以使用
-ache,hurt
和
sore
。
不要只用一个单词，
以避免枯燥。
要写出得病后的简单治
疗及心情，不能只写得病的情况。常见病句：
My nose is hurt
。 因
为
be
后面要加形容词，而
hurt< /p>
是动词，因此应使用
sore;
东西放在床上要用
o n the bed
。
生病，是卧床不起，应该说
stay in bed
。
表示吃药时，通过用
take some medicine
，不
用
eat
。
词汇量要控制在
40~60
之间。
My friend and I
My friend
and I
I
’
ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I
’
m 11. He
’
s older than me. He
’
s 150 cm tall. I
’
m 148 cm. He
’
s taller and stronger.
He
’
s 43 kg and I
’
m 41 kg. He
’
s heavier. We
’
ve got round faces and short hair. But
my
eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our
favourite colours are white and blue.
We like summer best. We both like
sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis.
On Sundays, we play basketball.
He
’
s good at basketball. But I do better at table
tennis. We laugh and
play together. How happy we are!
【要领点评】
写法：
这 篇作文的题目是
“我的朋友和我”
。
既然写作范围是两个人物，< /p>
就要笔墨均匀，
两者缺一不可。
不能只描写朋友，也不能只 叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。
解决这个
难点的关键是：找出两个
人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好
等方面列举出每个人的
具体实际情况，
再进行比较，
通过比较突出每个人物的特点。
这样 就
把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。
时态：像此类题目的作文，运用一般现在时即可。
句型：因为涉及两个人的比较，不要忘记使用比较级 句型：
A+be+
比较级
+than+B
。
注意：在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时，应一边列举，一边比较。不要一
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