中考英语作文中考写作素材8：生活方式

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The following questions are for your re ference

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以下信息仅供参考。

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1. What bad habits do you have in your life?

2. How do they affect(

影响

) your life?

3. How will you change your bad habits?

(2015

奉贤二模

)

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审

(Read)

从作文标题

“ Better habits

，

better life”

中可 得知，主要的写作内容应为培养良好习惯，打造美好生活。再根

据所给提示

:1. What bad habits do you have in your life? 2. How do they affect your life? 3. How will you change

your bad habits?

即可将书写方向定 为

:1.

我在生活中拥有

…

的不良习惯。

2.

它们对我的生活所产生的影响是

…3.

我可以 通过的方式来改变这些坏习惯。

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写

( Write)

根据之前所讲写作步骤：作文题目一写作框架一添加素材一初稿，

即可进行如下书写步骤的拆解：

接下来，我们需要思考，涉及到生活方式，习惯，品质类话题时，可以应用多少词汇及句式， 才会使文

章的内容变得更加丰富。

1.

What

bad

habits

do

you

have

in

your

life?

2 How do they affect(

影响

) your life?

3. How will you change your bad

habits?

开篇：

The bad habits that

I have are

中间：

They affect me in……

结尾：

I will change them by……

写作框架

开篇

中间

结尾

素材

作文题目

①

②

③

初稿

词汇大搜罗

▲名词

1. choice (274)

2. classmate (283)

3. example(513)

4. group (672)

5. habit (678)

rk( 728)

7. kind(827)

8. life (868)

9. method (945)

10. plan ( 1131)

11. point(150)

12. result(1268)

13. thing(1531

14. time (1546)

(1646)

(1702)

▲

动词

1. bring (196)

2. can (224)

3. finish(572)

(650

(683)

(695)

(835)

8. let(862)

9. must(985)

(1496)

(1637)

▲

形容词

1. bad (113)

2. better(154)

3. important(763)

4. late( 846)

5. many (918)

(968)

ary (998)

8. perfect(1106)

9. possible (1163)

10. serious(1345)

11. various(1618)

(1647)

▲

副词

:

1. all(42)

(48)

3. always (51)

4. often(1043)

5. seriously (1346

6. usually (1616)

连接词及短语大搜罗

▲表举例

for example, for instance, such as

▲表因果

so, therefore, as a result

▲表总结

in a word, in conclusion, to sum up

表达方式大搜罗

1. We all know that

…我们都知道…

2. As far as I am concerned

，…就我而言，……

3. I usually

…我通常…

4. If we want to

…，

we

…如果我们想要……，我们必须

< /p>

运用以上单词、连接词以及句式，就可以在已写出的文章框架

(

)

的中心句基础上，添加

必要的写 作素材，从而形成文章的初稿，如下：

初稿

Better habits, better

We all know that nobody is perfect. We all have various kinds of weak points or bad

habits, such as laziness,

selfishness and so on. As far as I am concerned, I have got a bad habit, and I always can't finish doing something on

time. It affects my life in many ways, and it also brings about some serious results. For example, I'm usually late for

handing

in

my

homework,

and

more

seriously,

my

classmates

will

be

influenced

in

group

work,

too. Therefore,

I

must take effective methods. The most important thing is to make plans before doing everything. Of course, to let

yourself know the time as often as possible is necessary. To sum up, If we want to make our life better, we have no

choice and we must get rid of bad habits.

◆

美

( beautify)

根据之前所讲的写作步骤：初稿一包装句子

Step 2

则可发现，文章在句式方面出现了如下问题

:

初稿

Better habits, better

We all know that nobody is perfect. We all have various kinds of weak points or bad habits, such as laziness,

selfishness and so on. As far as I am concerned, I have got a bad habit, and I always can't finish doing something on

time. It affects my life in many ways, and it also brings about some serious results. For example, I'm usually late for

handing

in

my

homework,

and

more

seriously,

my

classmates

will

be

influenced

in

group

work,

too. Therefore,

I

must take effective methods. The most important thing is to make plans before doing everything. Of course, to let

yourself know the time as often as possible is necessary. To sum up, If we want to make our life better, we have no

choice and we must get rid of bad habits.

1.

单纯使用宾语从句。

2.

五大基本句型。

3.

五大基本句型×

2

4.

五大基本句型×

3

5.

五大基本句型×

4

。

6.

短语使用过于简单

7.

五大基本句型×

5

8.

句式使用不当

+

主语过长。

9

单纯使用并列句。

考写作话 题

8

：生活方式、行为习惯、品质

根据以上问题，可将初稿修改成如下版本

准终稿

Better habits, better life

is

known

to

all

that

nobody

is

perfect.

We

all

have

various

kinds

of

or

bad

habits,

such

as

laziness,

selfishness and so on. As far as I am concerned, bad habit that I have got into is procrastination, means I

always put off things that should be done today till tomorrow.4 .I have to admit that it affects my life in many ways,

初稿

包装句子

5. which brings about some serious consequences. 6. For instance, I'm usually late for handing in my homework, and

more seriously, my teammates will be affected in group work, too. Therefore, 7. it's high time that I took effective

methods. The most important thing is to make plans before doing everything. Of course, 8. it is also necessary for me

to remind myself of the deadline as frequently as possible. To sum up, If we want to make our life better, 9. we have

no choice but to get rid of bad habits.

以上修改过程中，主要用到了如下单词及句型

超纲词汇大搜罗

1

。

shortcoming [] n

短处；缺点

2

。

procrastination[]n

拖延；拖延症

3

。

admit []v

。承认；允许

4

。

consequence [] n

结果；成果

5 teammate []n

。队友；同队队员

6. affect []v

影响

7

。

deadline []n

。最后期限；截止期限

8

。

frequently[]ad

。频繁地；屡次地

高分句式大搜罗

①固定句式：

It is known to all that

译为：“众所周知…”

考点链接：

原句

: Healthy food and plenty of vitamins are essential for your memory to work properly.

(

牛津教材九年级第一学期

Unit5)

替换为：

It is known to all that healthy food and plenty of vitamins are essential for your memory to work

properly.

②定语从句

+

固定短语：

get into the habit of

译为：“养成……的习惯”

③非限制性定语从句

+

谚语格言：

Never put off things that should be done today till tomorrow.

译为：“今日事，今日毕”

④固定句式

I have to admit that

译为：“必须承认

……

”

⑤非限制性定语从句

….,which…

译为：“的”

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参考第

19

页

)

⑥固定短语

For instance

译为：“例如”

⑦固定句式

It is high time that sb. did

译为：“该到某人做某事的时候了。”

考点链接：

原句

: Nowadays with rapid population growth, more water is needed. What can we do? Save and protect water

resources

(

新世纪教材九年级第一学期

Unit3 Lesson1)

替换为：

Nowadays with rapid population growth

，

more water is needed. So, it's high time that we saved and

protected water resources

。

⑧

it

做形式主语：

Itis+

形容词

+(for sb) to do sth

译为：“做某事对于某人来说

⑨固定句式

have no choice but to do

译为：“除了做……之外别无选择”

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参考第

65

页

)

◆

查

( check)

根据之前所讲写作步骤：包装句子一检查语法一成文，改正语法错误。

Step 3

所有步骤完成后，即可形成文字终稿，如下：

终稿：

Better habits, better

We all know that nobody is perfect. We all have various kinds of weak points or bad habits, such as laziness,

selfishness and so on. As far as I am concerned, I have got a bad habit, and I always can't finish doing something on

包装句子

检查语法

成文

time. It affects my life in many ways, and it also brings about some serious results. For example, I'm usually late for

handing

in

my

homework,

and

more

seriously,

my

classmates

will

be

influenced

in

group

work,

too. Therefore,

I

must take effective methods. The most important thing is to make plans before doing everything. Of course, to let

yourself know the time as often as possible is necessary. To sum up, If we want to make our life better, we have no

choice and we must get rid of bad habits.

（总结检测）

【

Section One

：

词】

A.

根据音标写出单词、词性及词义

音标

单词

词性

词义

[< /p>

?

?

?

:tk

?

m< /p>

?

?]

[pr

? ??

kr?

st

?

'ne

??

(

?

)n]

[

?d?m?

t]

[?k?

ns

?

kw

?

ns]

[?ti?mme?

t]

[?dedla?

n]

[?fri?kw?

ntli]

【

Section Two

：

句】

A.

句型替换训练

1.

原句：

We all know that Shanghai is a beautiful city.

替换为：

Shanghai is a beautiful city.

.

1.

原句：

To give the children whatever they want is unwise(

不明智的

).

替换为：

to give the children whatever they want.

B.

句子翻译训练

1.

除了出国留学

,

我别无选择

.(choice)

2

该到你去睡觉的 时间了

.(time).

C.

语法改错训练