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探索英语作文读后续写的艺术美：
2020
宁波十校联考英语写作 指导
原题重现
阅读下面短文
,
根据所给情节进行续写
,
使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was
apeacefulnight. I was sleeping with my brothers,
feeling warm and comfortable.
Mama was
sleepingnearby,covered s somewherenearby,watching
over us.
There was a brightmoonand we
had all had a good meal of venison
(
鹿肉
)Papa had
caughtearlier.
“Uncle
Louisis coming”, Papa said. We loved Uncle Louis.
He was a funny wolf, and
always had
interesting things to tell us and show us.
A little while later, Uncle Louis
appeared. We did notapproachhim with respect the
way
we approached Papa. We flew at him,
jumped all over him, and rolled him in the snow.
Uncle Louis laughed and patted us with
his paws. He is black all over, with yellow eyes,
and
he is very tall.
“It's
the longest night of the year” , Uncle Louis said,
“Does everyonefeel liketaking a
run
through the woods? I want to show you
somethingunusual.”
Hearing that,
Papa warned that it was dangerous to go near that
pack ofhumanswho
lived inthewoods.
“They are hardlydangerous”, Uncle Louis
laughed, “They are so clumsy and make so
much noise. They are not able to get
near us
——
or even see us if we don't want them to.
Besides, this is their
special night. They are quite peaceful and won't
be bothering about
wolves.”
“Oh, please, Papa, let us run through
the woods with Uncle Louis and see something
unusual! ” We all begged.
“It is a fine night”, Papa smiled, “I
must admit, I do feel like running.”
注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数 应为
150
左右；
2.
至少使用
5
个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1And we were off, all of us,
heading towards the woods.
Paragraph
2Westopped and sat on a hillside and below us was
the humans’ place.
分析故事
人物
Papa: humans are dangerousUncle Louis: a funny wolfMy brother and I: never
see
humans
环境
Moon, star, winter night, peaceful
主要情节
I want to show you
somethingunusual.
这个分析可以看出来：
故事主旨应该是平和的
，根据
peaceful
可以看出来，所以不适合写人和狼发生激烈
的冲突。
写作步骤
一、抓主旨下的矛盾
Conflict
: find the unusual thing
Solution
: celebrate with the humans
二、抓凸显矛盾解决的结尾
结尾：以景结情，情景交融，呼应主题
That unusual night, the harmonious
noise, I remembered,wentover the hilland
furtherto the moon.
我记得那个不寻常
的夜晚，这和谐的噪音越过树林，传得那么远，远到了月亮之上。
主题词：
unusual, moon
三、抓主要动作：
Action and Response
一个故事的
action
尽量用
3-5
< p>句概括，三句是最理想的，情节越简单，细节就越丰
富。
结合两段开头，我们可以猜测动作：
And
we were off, all of us, heading towards the woods.
1
、
We dashed.
2
、
We saw humans.
（看到人后，应该就要停下来，这样是衔接的）
We stopped and sat on a hillside and
below us was the humans' place.
3
、
We joined in their activity.