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写作练习：
（人物篇）
写人作文是中考的热门题材之一，
写这类作文时要注意以下几点：
1.
描写人物时，不能面面俱到，泛泛而写，要重点突 出其鲜明特征，以表现与其他人物的不同之处。
2.
叙述与人物有挂的事情时，要分清主次，前后照应，选取典型事例来刻画人物。
3.
描写人物时，一般在结尾处要对人物进行评价，抒发自己对人物的情感。
基本框架
人物
Part 1
外貌
性格
时间
Part 2
过程
事件
结果
Part 3
感受
写作评分标准及进步方向：
内容要点
应用词汇
:
高级词汇的合理使用（
energetic,
intellig ence
）
、同义词的变化使用
(
以
likebeautiful
为例
)
、短语的恰当
使用
(come up with)
语法结构的准确性：<
/p>
适当运用较复杂的语法，固定句式（感叹句、强调句、倒装句等）
、定语从句、状语 从句、
现在分词短语、动词不定式等。
Taps must be turned off after being used.
上下文的连贯性：
连接词、非谓语动词等结构。
First of all , in a word
等
连接词汇总：
1.
表示目的：
for this purpose
，
for this reason
，
so that
，
in order that
，
so as to
，
in order to
…
2.
< p>表示对照：
but
，
however
，
yet
，
on the other hand
，
on the contrary
…
3.
表示结果：
so
，
thus
，
therefore
，
as a result
4.
表示 因果：
because
，
since
，
< p>as, for，
because of
…
, owing to
5.
表示强调：
indeed
，
in fact
，
as a matter of fact
6.
表示并列观点：
firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally, first of all, also
，
and
，
in addition
，
besides
，
what
’
s more
，
moreover
…
,
last but not least,
what
’
s worse
7.
表示解释和说明：
for example
，
for instance
…
8.
表示比较：
like
，
just like
，
just as
，
in the same way
，
similarly
…
9.
表示总结：
finally
，
at last
，
in short
，
in a word
10.
表示让步：
alth ough
，
though
，
even though
，
no matter wh
—
建议记诵的话题词汇和短语：
11.
关系
：
father, parents , grandfather ,uncle ,aunt ,schoolmate, monitor
等，
cousin
比较加分哦
12.
职业：
teacher, doctor, nurse, dentist, cook, artist, scientist, soldier, manager, businessman, journalist
等
13.
外貌性格：
pretty
,
good- looking,
short
,
tall,
lovely,
adorable,
naughty,
smart
,
wise,
diligent,
lazy,
humorous,
attractive, funny, outgoing, serious,
quiet. warm-hearted, patient
，
strong- minded, hard-working
等
(
介绍外貌时候可
用上定语从句，开篇就亮点
)
14.
年龄：
a twenty-year-old man, as a boy of 15, at the age of 10, during his childhood, middle-aged , in his forties
等
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15.
兴趣爱好：
enjoy doing, like to do /doing, be fond of, be crazy about, be interested in , prefer to do/doing
16.
评价：
be popular with , be respected by, be honored as, be considered ad, be famous for, be regarded as, set a good
example
等。
句子：
1.
He shows great enthusiasm in pursuing knowledge.
2.
She is a ordinary- looking girl with short hair.
3.
Not only does she .. but also
…
4.
He sets us a good example.
5.
I’
ll never forget the day when
…
6.
I’
m so proud that I have such a good friend.
7.
He is considered as an honest, humorous teacher and he is respected and loved by the students and other teachers.
8.
Owing to his patient guide and my effort , I learned quite well at the end.
9.
Without his help, I would have
…
10.
It was because of their help and encouragement that I could get the best result.
11.
She has a great sense of humorous.
12.
She always comforts me when I get into trouble.
13.
I’
m very grateful to him for all that he has done for me.
14.
During the process of my growth, there are lots of people I want to thank, but the person I want to thank most is
…
15.
I want to thank sb. from the bottom of my heart.
满分作文评析：
(1)
时光匆匆，不知不觉中，同学们的初中生活即将结束 ，你们有一个懵懂的孩童成长为有知识有理想的少年。
在你们成长的历程中，渗透了父母
的心血，充满了师长的关爱，得到了朋友的帮助，请以
My_______________
为题，写一篇短文，描述你心中最重要的人或最令你难忘的人。
要求：
1.
把题目补充完整。
2.
文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
3.
词数在
60 - 80
之间。
4.
内容要齐全，包括以下几点：
Who is the person in your heart?
Why is the person so important in your heart?
What will you learn from the person in the future?
参考范文：
My father is a hero in my heart. Although he has been away for many years, he still lives in my heart now.
As a father of the five children, he knew his duty. When I was a little girl, I thought my father never knew tired. He
always worked and worked. He was a man
of great strength both physically and in the mind.
My father not only worked hard to support the whole family, but also looked after my ailing(
多病的
) mother. Day
and night, he struggled for years
with mother's disease. At last, my mother
recovered because of my father's love and help.
However, my father, a man who was great
and gentleness, fell down. I lost my hero. He was
too tired. He slept for ever.
A few years has passed, but I think my father never left me. He always smiles at me and lives in my heart. I know I
have my
father's love. It gives me courage to do anything,
to face any difficulties in my life.
From him, I will learn to stand up straightly, to be proud of who I am!
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